The Fortuneteller

Emeral lights glowing.

People screaming as rides

turn them around, over and upside down.

Sweet cotton candy cling to sticky fingers.

Foods of all kind scent the air.

The carnival is a fun jamboree.

 

Dark tent with eerie music playing.

Beads of assorted colors clatter

as the first costumer enters.

A gypsy emerges from the darkness,

Purple scraf keeps her fire red hair tied back.

Long earrings dangle.

Finger nails click the crystal ball

She knows the bewitching hour is here.

 

Shaky hand puts sliver coins into the pot.

Fortuneteller looks at his palm.

An evil grin forms on her lips,

an ex-boyfriend was he.

 

She leans over, bossoms jiggle in his face.

He looks into cold enthralling eyes.

Unable to move he waits for his fate.

 

Inventive idea she has.

Lightning flashes across the room.

She rubs her hand over her crystal ball,

mouth drops open.

"You will die tonight," she says.

 

Hellion face turns to laughter.

Ex-boyfriends epic courage falters,

he runs out and jumps on the ferris wheel.

Fortuneteller waves at him in a friendly gesture.

She watches as he falls to his death.

 

The fortuneteller stares in amazement.

"Guess I got this one right!"

 

Author's Note

Tell me what you think! Worte the for a group. Had to use the words : Bewitching, Enthralling, Inventive, Silver, Hellion, Epic

Reviews

[Clay Feet]

Evidently ex-boyfriend did not recognize his former girlfriend until he looked her closely in the eyes when she told him that he would die that night. Perhaps he then remembered that he didn't treat her right in the past, before she acquired her magical powers. Hell hath no fury like a woman scorned...especially a fortuneteller confronted by a jerk from the past.

You jerked our heads with this surprising twist. Wonderfully told!

[VelvetRosetta]

Lol...death, is not funny...but this was eerie, yet at the same time I found it comical...my mother went to a fortuneteller once and she said, I see a dark haired girl in an emergency room, a week later I broke my wrist...guess she got that one right!

Nicely done!

[?]

exactly I agree that ending was to die for. Awesome piece

[Krystal Nicole]

Scary. .A little freaky. . Great job.

[Alicia Schroeder]

I think it was cute, it would make a cute halloween type poem.. Great job;)

[Brad]

wow! you did this challenge up with a side order of WOW

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

Oh wow! That ending was to die fo..........um...
It was GREAT! I loved this story. The mysterious
lady will stay etched in my mind. I love the way
you gave us just enough detail for everyone to
have their own definition of the gypsy. Creating
her ourselves from our own fears and fascinations
in our individual lives was the muscle behind this work.

[Poetic Beauty]

this is a great story in this poem. A gypsy that predicts her ex's fate and falls to his death. Love the last line. It is so surreal almost.

[Tina Kline]

You did a great job using the chosen words. A dark, chilling tale in this. I guess he went to the wrong person to have his fortune told. A good chance for her to get revenge on someone who left her.