Candy Seasons

Alittle sweetness to go alone to fill your days!

Wandering mind take me away,

over arc of  rainbow,

where flowers bloom into gum drops.

Pink cotton candy blankets tree tops.

Sweet taffy butterflies fly about.

Lemonade sun splatters down.

 Winds laughter brings in spring.

 

Wandering mind take me away,

where the sea never ends.

Powder sugar beaches lay about,

and lollipop umbrellas twirl around.

Gummi fish in assorted colors swim

underneath the koolaid sea.

 Whistling wind sends in summer.

 

Wandering mind take me away,

where nature smells like cinnamon sticks.

Starburst fill the sky,

spilling liquid sparkles.

Wild berry lifesavers grow on bushes.

Tree tops are filled with skittle leaves.

 Wind blows in fall.

 

Wandering mind take me away,

over the rocky mountain tops,

where marshmellow snow drifts

in cold frigid air.

Chocolate bark trees dripping down,

making a smooth chocolate fall,

warmth of the sun heating it

into a pool of hot coco.

 Wind howls as winter shivers in.

 

Wandering mind take me away.....

 

Author's Note

Something sweet for my friends! Tell me what you think.

Reviews

[David Benson]

I really like this entire poem, but this single line took my breath away: "The wind howls as winter shivers in." It's the kind of line I wish I'd written.

I do have a couple of nits. Small ones. If it were me, I would eliminate many of the article in the work - "the" and "a" more often than not. For example, "over the arc of a rainbow" would become "over arc of rainbow," and "The winds laughter brings in spring" becomes "Wind's laughter brings in spring."

For me, dropping out articles gives more power to the words, more urgency. Don't get me wrong. This is delicious work no matter what. I really like the poem.

[Stef Outsiders]

bless this very sweet and clever well done...

[Ladysue]

I adore this...I actually wrote something like this a while ago...very sweet and imaginative...

[Rossen]

truth, It is truly scrumptious


toot sweet!

[Coyote Poetry]

I miss the candy store of old. Going to them and buying a milkshake and wandering the many candies. Your poem took me to the good days. Need some sweet things in a life to allow us to be content. A excellent poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[Valentine]

Brat..and I am trying to sed ten pounds......cute work..Kathie

[Michael Davis]

I really like it as it makes me feel as if I'm sitting on a mountain top somewhere with gobs of of candy all around. All I really need to do is reach out and grab a few bites and then I"m good for the day. it'd be great for a musical or play!.....Good job well done.

[EmpressPoetess]

Can I go there? lol! this is just darling, a sweet journey to a yummy neverland of tasty treats! love it!

[Kelsie Eileen Stark]

This is very sweet, and lots of sugar I see? Well, first; very nice descriptions & imagery..this poem reminded me of "Strawberry Feilds Forever" by The Beatles..