Candy Seasons

Alittle sweetness to go alone to fill your days!

Wandering mind take me away,

over arc of  rainbow,

where flowers bloom into gum drops.

Pink cotton candy blankets tree tops.

Sweet taffy butterflies fly about.

Lemonade sun splatters down.

 Winds laughter brings in spring.

 

Wandering mind take me away,

where the sea never ends.

Powder sugar beaches lay about,

and lollipop umbrellas twirl around.

Gummi fish in assorted colors swim

underneath the koolaid sea.

 Whistling wind sends in summer.

 

Wandering mind take me away,

where nature smells like cinnamon sticks.

Starburst fill the sky,

spilling liquid sparkles.

Wild berry lifesavers grow on bushes.

Tree tops are filled with skittle leaves.

 Wind blows in fall.

 

Wandering mind take me away,

over the rocky mountain tops,

where marshmellow snow drifts

in cold frigid air.

Chocolate bark trees dripping down,

making a smooth chocolate fall,

warmth of the sun heating it

into a pool of hot coco.

 Wind howls as winter shivers in.

 

Wandering mind take me away.....

 

Author's Note

Something sweet for my friends! Tell me what you think.

Reviews

[David Benson]

I really like this entire poem, but this single line took my breath away: "The wind howls as winter shivers in." It's the kind of line I wish I'd written.

I do have a couple of nits. Small ones. If it were me, I would eliminate many of the article in the work - "the" and "a" more often than not. For example, "over the arc of a rainbow" would become "over arc of rainbow," and "The winds laughter brings in spring" becomes "Wind's laughter brings in spring."

For me, dropping out articles gives more power to the words, more urgency. Don't get me wrong. This is delicious work no matter what. I really like the poem.

[Blossom]

really yummy. its really sweet and paints a colorful picture.

[Tina Kline]

This is full of yummy sweet fun and I love the imagery. This is a delight.

[Marie Harrison]

Yum! I don't know about you, but I'm so ready for spring! I can just taste it on my tongue. This poem brought me closer!

[?]

Wonderful images and fragrances you have given us all.
Such a fun piece
Love it

[Jim Parson]

This was terrific! You painted such the perfect picture! This visual was so exact I could see each and every morsel. Well done!

[Amy]

This made me smile while reading it. it reminds me of Willy Wonka as well..very well done!

[SpokenWord]

This reminds me of Willie Wonka The imagination is a wonderful thing and it can take us to lands far away from reality. Yes we do need more sweetness and fun our lives.

[Brad]

you hit all my senses here, wow! this was literary LSD

[Priyankaabhilaashi]

Sweetness to sweeten the empty days..!!!!!

Wow..!!! Sweetie Sweet..!!!

Like it very much..!!!

[trainwreck]

Its an interesting, and sweet poem.