Just Breathe

Breaking up is hard to do!

She sits under the weeping willow,

it's tears surrounding her in sorrow

She wanted to preserve her heart,

keep it from the pain of loosing another

For now all she can do is just breathe

 

Her eyes scan the open meadow,

it was secluded, no one to comfort her

She wishes to be happy,

have some kind of deliverance from her broken heart

But for now all she can do is just breathe

 

Must she sustain this misery?

Can her heart be plentiful again?

Will she find another love?

She slumps to the cold damp earth

There were no tears left,

they had dried up like a summer drought

She tries to just breathe

 

Suddenly she feels another  presence

She  looks through sadden eyes,

wondering if her prayers have been answered

In the distance she sees something,

is it him or an illusion?

She waits as the figure gets closer

Holding her breath in  anticipation,

unable to just breathe

 

She stands on shaky legs,

The silence cutting through her like knifes

She screams in disappointment as the horse stops,

grazing on the green grass

 

There was nothing left for her here

She climbs onto the beautiful blond horses back

and gallops away,

the wicked wind blowing through her hair

She tries to  muster up the strength........

TO JUST BREATHE

Author's Note

Something I'm trying out for a contest, tell me what you think! We had to use wicked wind in the poem!

Reviews

[Ladysue]

this is beautifully written...I can feel the pain in this piece...nicely done...

[Olivia Ashley]

AMAZINNG!I lovve it!

[G. K. Bostic]

I love the point made.....sometimes all you can do is breathe! This is very well done and well enjoyed. (Just a little typos: 1st line of 2nd verse should be 'her eyes scan') Beautiful poem!!

[OT]

the contest is back up!! so make sure you enter! this is brilliant!

[SusanB]

Very well done. I can feel the pain of a broken heart in this piece. Very powerful and the feelings are bought out in every line.
Thanks for sharing!

[Valentine]

I like this very much, also using the weeping willow..I have used that tree in a poem or two and it makes a good back drop for weeping and sadness,,Nice job,,Valentine

[Undying Glory]

Wow you've just captured the whole scene, feelings, images and all, in this amazing poem here, very good work. This was just so heart-rending, beautiful work!!

[Goodbye]

You really, really captured the essence of utter and complete dejection after a horrible breakup, that feeling of being empty, not knowing how to fill the void...

This is excellent poetry my friend.

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

This is a cold story. Its so sad, but you did a beautiful job
of telling it.

[Ron]

I loved first 4 verses. So disappointed when the loss was a male lover! How powerful would this have been for a lost sibling, child or parent! BUT eliminating lovers from poetry takes time to do. Very fine first three stanzas.