Wanting To Be Wanted

Dying to be loved!

     she sits in a dark room,

     listening to the wind howl

     the rain pouring on the tin roof

     thunder ecohes through the walls

     flashes of lightening blinds her

 

     The agony she feels is suffocating her

     she hears voices in her head telling her she's useless

     loneliness over powers her,

     she can't breathe

 

     From the minute she was born....

     nobody loved her,

     nobody wanted her,

     nobody held her

 

     she grew into a young lady,

     hoping and praying, almost begging for love

     but she is still empty, alone, without

 

     she is a woman now,

     still waiting for the warmth of another person,

     still yearning to be wanted

     her whole body is screaming for affection

 

     she wants to be free,

     to love

     for someone to love her,

     to hold her

 

     The despair grows stronger everyday,

     theres no escaping the pain

     nobody wants her,

     she feels  like she's doomed to be alone

 

     So here she sits in a dark room,

     listening to the wind howl

     the rain pouring on the tin roof

     thunder echoes through the walls

     flashes of lightening blinds her

 

     And the voices telling her she is useless

 

 

   

Author's Note

Tell me if it's good, bad or just okay, or maybe excellent!!! LOL

Reviews

[Alicia Schroeder]

It sounds like she needs to go outside, get some fresh air, take a walk.. However, it is a beautifully written peice..

[Desert Dreamer]

Amazing how strong is our human need to be loved...a sad story, as if she is paralyzed by her need to be loved...I want to tell her to stop waiting and go out and find what she longs for.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A thoughtfully entrancing piece, full of emotional turmoil and madness, lustful in places with a keen eye for clarity, well done

[JanieB]

Oh, this is so sad. Good write.

[Treo LeGigeo]

So sad, but well done.

[cfix]

I really enjoyed this because I can really relate to this write alot.
I used to be like this. I like this write alot.

[Sara Mercury]

We should realise that someone out there wants us, or else we would not exist in the first place. We should love everyone and live constantly in that state of love, despite how much the world hurts us or ignores us. But that's easier said than done, isn't it? I'm reminded of something I heard to the effect of, "Babies will grow sickly and die if they are not held and shown love." If we do not receive any kind of love, we will grow sickly and die; if not in body, then in our souls. That is why no one should be completely alone. We were not meant to be an island. Even in the Garden of Eden, GOD created Adam as a companion. And then He realised that Adam longed for a mate, so He created Eve. Adam was created, but was never alone. He had GOD. Woman was created, and was never alone, because she had a man. So, if we are alone and have no mate, or feel that no one loves us, to whom should we turn ourselves for that love?

[Launa'sWrite]

literally DYING for love... yes, as others mentioned, the tone of the poem is very sad. I like how you ended the poem by repeating the first verse and adding one line from the next stanza. The reality is, is that one can spend years in this state, if you keep playing the same broken record as the character has. The words in the poem echo the actual story that one with low self-esteem, low self-worth, may tell themselves (ie no one has loved me since I was born, nobody wants me, there's no escaping the pain) very fatalistic thinking.
Excellent Job!

[OtherWorldWoman]

It's good...I can relate...Sad, but good.