I like this poem! I know how hard it is and how much it hurts to be cheated on. You are right though, things like this happen for a reason, to teach you to be a strong woman!
I like this poem! I know how hard it is and how much it hurts to be cheated on. You are right though, things like this happen for a reason, to teach you to be a strong woman!
Yes, as Mr. Yeats said, things fall apart. He also said the center cannot hold. What the center can do, however, is drop a lemon and find someone more worthy. It may take a wile to get over this guy, but in the end, he's just another lesson.
I like the photograph that illustrates the heartbreaking story in this poem, which is beautifully told. When I got to the last stanza that begins with "If things fall apart, remember..." I thought "Oh she's going to offer to wait around. But he's undeserving of her. But instead your narrator declares herself a strong woman who won't be anyone's leftovers. I like that. And I hope this did not happen to you.
I got chills all over from the first two lines..
This is such an emotional poem..and oh so so sad..I have been there...
I felt your poems first 4 verses were quite amazing, but I feel you could (and I am only saying this because you asked for true reviews..) could be better.. the last verse really doesn't feel the same..It just sounds like defence or spiteful..angry..
Maybe you do not even need the last verse.. just went back to read it again.. Until the last verse ..I loved it..
If you have time perhaps you might read mine..
Lisa, now in Spain
Posted 2 Years Ago
2 Years Ago
Thank you for stopping by! I'm glad you liked it. Are you talking about the last stanza? Should I ta.. read moreThank you for stopping by! I'm glad you liked it. Are you talking about the last stanza? Should I take the whole thing off?
Oh gosh..sorry, yes last stanza.. I used verse..because of music...I think (and this is just me..tha.. read moreOh gosh..sorry, yes last stanza.. I used verse..because of music...I think (and this is just me..that the last line of your previous stanza is very strong.. 'My empty body hopes you'll be happy" really is so moving and says it all...
Lisa
2 Years Ago
Thanks for your nice review!
2 Years Ago
You are so welcome... Looking forward to seeing what you end up doing with this lovely poem..
.. read moreYou are so welcome... Looking forward to seeing what you end up doing with this lovely poem..
Lisa
'Dear Husband of Mine'
Karen,
I see by your author's note this is an 'Epistolary Poem'. You showed how a person can assimilate experiences in the form of a letter with the relationship laid out in emotion. Your poem surly did that. I noticed the things which were real to you in once known dynamics between you and this person. I especially liked your description of the location and the flowers and colors. This was difficult to read but that is what made it real. What is real is that I sensed the possibility of not harboring bitterness as you move forward. That is wonderful.
Bless you as you live, love and write.
Kathy
Posted 2 Years Ago
2 Years Ago
Thank you kindly!
2 Years Ago
Karen,
You are welcome kindly! A little kindness goes a long way with me. Hope you keep stay.. read moreKaren,
You are welcome kindly! A little kindness goes a long way with me. Hope you keep staying happy and healthy of mind and soul.
Kathy
I think... Well, sadly, I sometimes think love is a lie. Without going into details, I find myself questioning everything. And to find strength when your world falls apart? You're an incredible woman! Good luck.
If this is an autobiographical post .. you are one hell of a woman .. however, if this is a product of an amazing imagination .. then you are indeed one hell of a woman .. whatever the case might be .. you are more than deserving of the 100/100 rating I have this moment assigned thee ................. N :)
Posted 2 Years Ago
2 Years Ago
WOW! Thank you so much!
2 Years Ago
you are more than welcome .. my pleasure entirely ..
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