stay

the menacing sound

of calliopes collapsing -

the mating call of lunatics,

preventative counter-action,

cessation, recovery,

the seeds and their sorrow

ripping the sod,

begging from borrowers,

lost in the arms

of a cloak filled with daggers,

we stagger and gag,

we sad coffin-draggers

the ticker's been tapered,

the rain's been delayed -

get away, go farther, now..

stay.

Reviews

[AleyshaRosa]

A few goosebumps rose on my arms upon reading this. Eery... distinguished among other poems. I loved your wide use of vocabulary; words that I haven't heard/seen in a very long time. Refreshing to read verses such as this with such vivid trauma.

of a cloak filled with daggers,
we stagger and gag,
we sad coffin-draggers

Amazing verses. I almost gagged on simply reading the word, on simply reading these three disturbed verses.

Koodoos

[Ees]

Love it!
I particularly enjoyed the third and fourth lines.
I love the last, one word, one line stanza. Works well and is quite appropriate for the content.
Your writing tends to surprise me in how its oddness can tingle and turn down the page while giving away little in the way of what's going on, it still paints vivid pictures.

[Ana Soo]

intriguing.. this is like a music scheme conveyed into words. the violin comes to mind. we stagger and gag-> sexiest.

[DrD]

An inriguing write, Stimey, that stirs the imagination with its imagry. I really enjoyed this.

[Emberlorna]

Wow so gripping and melodic. The abstract imagery and feeling of sorrow and dread. This is really amazing :}

[Cwortknee]

Oh I absolutely love the flow of this. I actually read it out loud just to feel the perfection of each chosen word. Marvelously composed write. A really enjoyable read. Thanks for sharing!