crowds

just feelings....i don't know much about genres or audience...should there even be such categories? all i know is i feel these things and i write them down.

my bottle is half empty

yet my glass is still half full

i know i have much more to give

if only i can live

i tred through waters thick with doubt

and hope i do not drown

i flail my arms and legs to live 

no-one hears me shout

i write my words and sing them loud

and act as if im proud

ive lost all love, ive lost all care

i take comfort in crowds

in crowds where i can disappear 

in crowds where im alone

in crowds who dont communicate

we all stare at are phones

Author's Note

be honest

Reviews

[Mike Defreitas]

Interesting. Really enjoyed that. Pithy, yet approaching something deep about contemporary human nature: how we like to get lost, lose responsibility for how we are, for how we feel and who we see ourselves to be. Distraction. Crowds. Leaves no room for thinking, meditation and contemplation about ourselves and our place in the world.

[Symphonic_Sunflowers]

I really liked this piece, because i find the last stanza, is so very true now a days.

Thats all people really do - stare at our phones.
Like my boyfriend, who is constantly on his phone playing some stupid game of his - so ive made a rule where who ever is on their phone whilst on a date has to pay for the next 6 dates. He doesnt stare at his phone as much now :p

(sorry for that little piece of my life)
Over all, Thomas, I enjoyed this poem :)

[Thomas]

haha no apologies necessary...i know what youre dealing with...i'll sit down with my girlfriend to watch a movie and 10 minutes into it she'll be on candy crush...i personally dont play games or really even like owning a cell phone. its a necessary evil nowadays unfortunately. theres no more face time, except of course, "face time" lol

[Symphonic_Sunflowers]

aha "necessary evil" just like my great aunt rosmary says.

[Thomas]

yeah sometimes i wish we could go back to the days when there was a house phone...and if you werent home...you werent being reached.

[Symphonic_Sunflowers]

haha i liked how when i was like 7 my friends and i would always go to a certain place in this paddock behind my house and wed all wait there for eachother to talk. We couldve used the house phone but we didnt know our numbers and were too scared and lazy to ask our parents.

[Thomas]

i always talk about how when i was young the street was always filled with kids playing sports or doing whatever. now you never see it...everyones on computers and video games. its true...i had a spot in the woods behind the school we would all hang out...i think our parents preferred it that way. cant be tying up the phone line

[Symphonic_Sunflowers]

haha, yeah and i remember always forgetting to go home when the street light turns on and running as fast as my short 7 year old legs would let me go to get home without getting in trouble.
I cant believe that was almost 10 years ago now.

[Thomas]

yeah i caught a few whoopins for not making that deadline...well mine was dinner at 5 oclock...if you were late, in my dads eyes, you were insulting mom who took time to make dinner...so if you were late it wasnt good. im 25 now so jeez 7 years old was 18 years ago...jeez

[Symphonic_Sunflowers]

haha, time is funny thing

[Thomas]

the older you get the faster it goes

[Cory Barrett]

Its the contemporary extravert! Climb into a room with a thousand people to talk to, and stare at your phone in avoidance. A lot of desperation in the speaker here, searching for an ending that will just never come.

[Thomas]

thanks for your review...im new to the site...just got on here today...youre my first review...appreciate your input...hope you enjoyed it...

[Cory Barrett]

Well welcome to WC, it can be a lot of fun on here.

[Thomas]

from the writer...should be "our" not "are" probably should have checked that before