Severed

Severed

A Poem by Stephanie
"

I'm not talking about literal cuts and gashes... How it feels when a body is severed from itself, from the person.

"

Scattered, lost, disconnected

Go through the motions

Without being there…

Her mind reasons logically,

the way it always has.

It tries to reason with her frantic heart

that beats quietly backwards within her chest.

Everything is upside down,

                          inside out,

                                flipped,

                                   rotated,

                                      wrong.

How did a harmless something in the dark

create a world of everything in her heart?

A world that changes with every footfall-

Everything, nothing, everything, nothing…

How did she make such a gross misjudgment?

A boundary line crossed,

A body shut down…

It only took a moment:

A moment frozen in memory,

                        Lost in time.

She tightens her grip on blame

each time he tries to steal it away.

Every reminder is a stitch,

   every minute a numbing bliss.

Time will tape her heart back into place,

     her thoughts into coherence,

         her tears back into their internal reservoir.

It’ll be okay.

It’ll be okay.

 

© 2013 Stephanie


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This is bloody fantastic. There are so many favourite bits that it would be impossible to mention them all but 'everything is upside down, inside out, flipped, rotated, wrong' is a really nice part, it flows really well and the format you have chosen makes it different and fun to read. 'Time will tape her heart back in place' is another highly visual line as it almost juxtaposes the ancient saying that time is a healer, in this case her heart isnt necassarily healed, just partially fixed for the meantime and the remnance of the hurt is apparent. 'Her tears back into their internal reservoir' is once again a lovely piece of imagery, the tears are still very much present they are just hidden, I thonk this is the case with a lot of people who seem happy but are actually hurting. I love the repetition at the end too. It finishes it off nicely and gives a sense of almost fake hope, almost like you are trying to convince yourself! LOVELY!

Posted 14 Years Ago


"It'll be okay." The timeless words of comfort. =D (lol)
But in all seriousness, very nice. I really like the concept of the one simple mistake that leads to all the trouble. It reminds me of a song "Who I am hates who I've been." There's a part where he literally says "Stop right there, that's exactly where I lost it, see that line, I never should have crossed it."
It is truly something, how one simple mistake can lead to devastating consequences and I believe you have captured that essence in this write, very well. Good job, thanks for the great write!
-Azza

Posted 14 Years Ago


love this....



1 million/100 :D

Posted 14 Years Ago


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The mind and heart are always in an eternal conflict. This is what makes life so hard to digest. Our minds say one thing, while our hearts scream another. Logic and reason work best most of the time, but then there are those moments that make absolutely no sense at all. Yet, it could not be anymore right... And sometimes, both logic and reasoning, and our emotional sensory perceptions have no answer at all...

Posted 14 Years Ago


I can't even begin to tell you how amazing this is. Great, great job. It sums up a lot. It makes sense, and yes, I know what 'severed' you are referring to. This perfectly depicts that.

Posted 14 Years Ago


Your imagery is brilliant... conveying that sense of separation we can find within our hearts and minds... Deeply emotional and gripping... I just love the vividness of Time taping "her heart back into place..." Powerful write!

Posted 14 Years Ago


Yikes Steph, your words really cut me deep here... trying to pick up the pieces of a shattered life destroyed by someone else's carelessness... though very sad your creative expression is really amazing and if this is something you are going through at the moment my heart goes out to you.

Posted 14 Years Ago



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