Dance Lessons

Contest: Hay (na) ku.

Ballerina,

teach me

your graceful ways.

 

The smoothest steps

timed to

music...

 

Toes

on pointe

without falling flat...

 

Moving in rhythm

to life's

orchestra...

 

Twirling

in circles

with perfect balance...

 

Teach me grace.

Teach me...

Ballet.

 

Author's Note

Haynaku has 3 lines. One word in the first line, two in the second, three in the third (or reverse). This is a mixture. Never tried this form before.

Reviews

[Andrew'sWonderland]

Another Beautiful Piece!!! I loved and admire how you try out all sorts of different styles and formats! Great Job!!!

[TeenRomance]

Very beautiful :-)

[deleted]

This is absolutely beautiful! You definitely painted a picture of a beautiful ballerina with this piece (concrete poetry/love it). Well done!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Ballerinas are amazing how then can keep such balance and grace under pressure, such a beautiful tribute to a under appreciated art form.

[gravitylava]

This is cute, the only part that cofuses me is the end. It sounds like you are angry or something by saying please. Also since it's colored pink it just looks weird. Like you're begging or jealous. Sorry I'm so picky, because this is a great poem. I think it's lovely the way it is, just that ending gets me. Maybe if the word was something different than please. Like

Teach me grace.
Teach me...
Ballet.

But if you like it the way it is that's fine. This is nice poem that made me smile. :)

[Georgia Gypsy]

This is lovely Stephanie! job well done! makes me want to watch the ballet, the lines of your poem flowed just as a ballerina as she dances across the stage so your words did across the page....lovely!!