me vs the rowing machine

a funny true incident that recently occured

 

So I got up this morning ready to embrace the day and start the New Year off right. So I’m on this health kick right now; organics, whole grains, fruits and veggies, and lean proteins. Yeah I know, but any way so I go to the gym right, and they got this new rowing machine. It’s supposed to mimic like kayak rowing right, so I bike for a bit then some elliptical then I decide to take this thing on.  Well let me tell ya, it put up quite a fight. You don’t know embarrassment till you beat yourself up with exercise equipment. So I hopped on that mother and stuck my feet up on the platform in front. Then I grabbed the bar that’s supposed to mimic the ore and started doing it. Well on about the third stroke, to my dismay.  I discovered in an unfortunate and slightly painful manor, that the seat moved. So I go to pull the bar back, and as I do I slide forward and nail myself in the face with the bar. Needless to say I haven’t been back on it since, but when I do get back on for round 2 that suckers going down.

Author's Note

yes its true, im a loser i know, but tell me what ya thought of it any opinion is a good opinion

Reviews

[Joanna Maharis]

I like what you have so far. This would make for good dialogue, by having the character telling another character about his or her day, and then having the other character telling about his or her day, as well. Throughout the duration of reading this piece it was reminiscent of the show Seinfeld. This is a nice start, but it needs work interms of character development, plot development and finding the focal point of the story. Every plot has a conflict or issue within a given story to be resolved. Maybe you could incorporate some hijinx this character gets into either by himself or herself, or together with another character. Some examples of this is like on Seinfeld, George Costanza is always getting into some form of hijinx with some other characters on the show. Maybe you could have this character return to the gym, and develop the plot somemore from there. But the beginning is good.

[Legion]

lol


Take it down. I got money on ya. :)