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A by Sheba

Well hear it is... I fell inlove oops? Life is so stupid sometimes.

I really liked my life of solitude adventure, but noooooo here you come.

I messed up I know, and I intend to correct it.

I don't need trust.

I don't need friends.

I don't need to waist my time trying to be there for someone.

Its stupid how people start to reliy on there spouse..... kk

I'm going to break up with him in the morning.

I'm not going to do this at all....

No no not for me man??????

© 2009 Sheba


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Another interesting poem, Sheba. I can tell that you are pouring out your deepest feelings here (or at least that's how it comes across on the page). There are quite a few spelling and grammar errors, however.

I saw that in your bio, you said "I pretty much failed spelling," which I don't hold against you, but if you want to look more professional, it's something you can work on. So before I correct your spelling, are you open to having criticism about it?

Nonetheless, I enjoy the "story" part of it, and in some ways because of the subject matter, the loosely put-together style of it makes it better. I think it all depends on the poem (and what you're trying to get across).

Posted 10 Years Ago



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Sheba
Sheba

Elko, NV



About
Well I am 23 years old, I love to write about everything and nothing, I love poetry but all my poems have been coming out dark lately (So enjoy) I figure I just have ups and downs in my life so thats .. more..

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