SIHT SNAEM GNIHTYREVE DNA GNIHTON

just mixed stuff I guess

 This is the part where I run away
I don't mean to it just turns out that way
     Kinda a lil bit scared now, I should probably ride this one out till the end of the story,
That wall is looking very warm behind it, I should go.
Come on Sheba don't let the fear of striking out keeping from playing the game...
Man is this supposed to feel like this? Or are you laying on top me cutting off my air supply?
Run Run Run Run Run Run Run Run Run Run Run Run Run Run Run Run Run Run Run Run Run Run Run Run Run Run 
But wow you have a way with words????
But so do I? And lot of other people..
Maybe I will just hide for a while.. No Sheba can not 
come out to play...
Its ok I'm on your side, I'm not routing for you to fail.. Not today Sheba:P
What if I told you that...............No I'm not going to say that,, Just a bunch of lies...
I still wish to say it.. Why is that.. great just another lie to add on top of all the others...
I need a blanket its cold outside today.. Can I have my earing back or do 
I have to come and get them?
Could I have a dollar? Well what if I gave you a 
dollar, then could I have one?
Stop yelling at me I didn't do anything wrong, Why didn't I?
Oh that fly, I remember now..
I'm sorry I can't say it, even if I want 
2 I'm sorry.. I wounder if you?????????? No probably not I guess
What if you messed up so bad you could not fix it?
What if God was a woman? would I get my way? or would you leave me here to play?
Good bye Lil Ray,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,

Reviews

[Eric Pudalov]

Whoo...wow, this is highly intense, and unpredictable. I must admit it's a little hard to follow, what with the words jumping around all over the place.

But to its credit, I know that that's how our minds and thought processes can be at times. I certainly feel that I think this way a lot (although you might not know that from my writing). Somehow, it reminds me of some poetry/prose I read on the back cover of Bob Dylan's "Highway 61 Revisited."

It had a very loosely put-together story, but was extremely random (and probably drug-influenced). So yes, I kind of like this poem, in an abstract way. It's certainly not how I write, but we are two very different writers. I'm curious, and would like to read some more.