Take Me With You

I wrote this for my cousin Joey who's fighting for our country

 

Take me with you to that place far away

So I wont have to miss you every day.

 

 

Take me with you to help when things crumble

And those awful words that you might mumble.

 

 

 

Take me with you through the chaos you come across

    To see what scars keep covering up your loss.

 

 

Take me with you to see the little things

Such as drumming the songs from bands you always sing.

 

 

Take me with you, for you’re my hero more than you think.

I want to see each memory link.

 

 

Take me with you when you’re feeling blue.

The one I wish to comfort is you.

 

 

Take me with you so I can see you cry.

Holding back is hard. I know, I try.

 

 

Take me with you so that every night

We could say a prayer to ease our fright.

 

 

Take me with you to see the distance around

Then suddenly hear that bone chilling sound.

 

 

Take me with you to spend precious times on Christmas

Like every year with Grandma, not once do we miss.

 

 

Take me with you, for I’ll never let you fall.

I’ll stand by you when your duty does call.

 

 

Why you like it their, that I’ll never know

I guess your true colors really show.

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Wildecat]

I liked this poem, I am a Vietnam Veteran and I raise my glass and tip my hat and say thanks to everyone past and present for their service to this great Country. Well done.

[M. Amphet Salt]

I like this. I am not one for attachment and loss, but this is very sensual. I like the use of your couplets. I love using this technique. It is very catchy. In the first line the word (Want) is misspelled. I beg to differ with Kati Fierce your rhymes were not off; I think that she was refering to the christmas line and there is nothing wrong with that rhyme. If that is argued with you, tell them to check a kindergarden text book. Thanks for sharing. Your friendly editor, Duane.

[Kaotic Barbie]

This was really nice. Some of your sentences didn't match like the rhyming was off a little or something but other then that it was a really nice poem!