12-22-13

I’ve smoked 11 ciggarettes,
In the past hour 
And all 
I can think about
Is how much I love you
And how much
I’ve never liked ciggarettes
But I let them take my breath away
The same way you took mine.

Reviews

[Ufi Auttorri ~ Amy C. T..]

Wonderful. You have the beginnings of a cancerous future with a lot of gasping and clutching. Think about it a bit more. Sure, it's just a poem but they all have a seed of truth in them somewhere, don't they? Just saying...

100.0000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000 bitter butts

[plainme]

This is a brilliant write. It's so clever and the fact it's simple, it's just there, makes it beautiful.

[Tai Ryens]

Seeking something to replace the woes of the emptiness left by someone you adored so very dearly, and the pursuit for the replacement often leads to self-destructive tendencies. Well done, you've portrayed the pain of loss and the aftermath very poignantly.