Seeing that you don't reply back on the poems you upload here, I feel like I can write anything here. lol I won't.... : ) The poem kinda takes me back to my sister in grade school, screaming at my mom how she is all grown up and the world is against her ad unfair. I could just picture you stomping your feet at the same time trying to explain away why you are smoking pot or hanging out with friends who harm themselves. When having the same fights with our parents are also with our friends, it's reassuring to see that someone else suffers as we do... even if it is a temporary mood for them to get into the pants!! : ) This girl I know who is now an actress told me that guys know their many roles and become quite good at it; girls SUFFER their roles and are either victim or inspiration to another. I like the way you write..... don't stop. xox -Mark
Seeing that you don't reply back on the poems you upload here, I feel like I can write anything here. lol I won't.... : ) The poem kinda takes me back to my sister in grade school, screaming at my mom how she is all grown up and the world is against her ad unfair. I could just picture you stomping your feet at the same time trying to explain away why you are smoking pot or hanging out with friends who harm themselves. When having the same fights with our parents are also with our friends, it's reassuring to see that someone else suffers as we do... even if it is a temporary mood for them to get into the pants!! : ) This girl I know who is now an actress told me that guys know their many roles and become quite good at it; girls SUFFER their roles and are either victim or inspiration to another. I like the way you write..... don't stop. xox -Mark
Constant repetition of actions in a relationship remind me of various Atmosphere songs, except in your case, it is much less explicit. Normally, an average person couldn't be half a poet's pencil with their vocabulary; yet here you are, with their mental dictionaries at your disposal crafting poetry as expressive as many. Simplicity IS sometimes a wondrous way to go for a poem.