Venomous

Venomous
Just another person,
Just another one
Just another soothsayer,
Just another forbidden son

Amazing how time berates you,
Amazing how the breath that follows
Amazing how the truth escapes too,
Amazing how time makes you choke instead of swallow

Oh righteous one upon the pedestal,
Will you ever bother to look down??
Oh saddened one always ringing the bell,
Who knows how long you've lost and broken your crown

You're just another knight with armor so chinked,
You're just another torn flower
You're just another missing link,
You're just the one who has no power

So this is your time to end the pain,
Make it well and do it right
The typical version of a man gone insane,
You're nothing without your pity and spite.

Copyright 3-21-2011 Stacy Perry

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Wow is my answer to this poem. I like the honest and direct words in this poem. Sometime we must tell the people who use and abuse to go away.
"You're just another knight with armor so chinked,
You're just another torn flower
You're just another missing link,
You're just the one who has no power"
A outstanding poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[StacyPerry]

When I first wrote, which everyone knows [I don't go back well, unless once in a great while there is something I am just "having to re-do", lol], I thought there might be a line that was missing, but this write was so passionate when it came out of me that I couldn't just go "make up a line to satisfy", ya know??

So I thank you and yes, there probably "should" be something else there, but I can't bring myself to take what passion and anger in the moment when I wrote it and sit and re-think of that certain something to pop in there to make it be something else when I wrote from the HEART as I always do with my work.

You know that hun.......I thank everyone for their constructive criticism as I always am up for others words and ways of thinking. I like to see how people take my writing and also if they get how either "Rational" or "Emotional" minded I was at the time.....or just "Wise" Minded I was...... [Smile]

[Nicaushio Yamaki]

Learn to write with your eyes and not with your mind; when you're imagining your own writting emotions. Otherwise pretty good.

[Sherene]

nicely written. liked the rhyme seqeunces. like the line "Oh righteous one upon the pedestal,
Will you ever bother to look down??" I don't think He ever gonna look down.
i feel .. is there a link missing?