Semi Permanent

11-25-2010 [Turkey Day]

A deafening silence fills the room,
As I sit and contemplate our talk
A darkened sunny sky seems to loom,
As I bring my mind to a slow walk
The racing thoughts the used to be,
Are no more as you have bound my soul
The friendship that was you and me,
Unfortunately is on a semi permanent hold.

Reviews

[Robyn]

i really like the contrast you use between words like the deafening silence and darkened sunny sky

[Poetic Beauty]

This is a complicated situation and one is which you will have to figure out on your own what the next move is. the poem clearly shows your emotions.

[Ruth]

Was is always a word that holds regret and sorrow, as I said on ME love, this is wonderful
xx

[Art]

there is a sadness to this write and yet you have found the emotional of relationships to create this poem...

nice...

[Michael X]

nice, this is clever and subtle, sentimental and well defined, crisp imagery
lively and full of a sense of spirited charm, lovely job :)