One Up

9-5-10

I did this better,
You did it right
I did this in the day,
You did it at night
I did this higher,
You did this lower
I did this under,
You did this over
I can do it all,
You can as well
We can do this each day,
A true living hell
We one up each other every chance we get,
So let's agree to disagree on how good we both are......wanna bet??

Reviews

[Aimee Mahathy]

Oh this is very good! It read very naturally and exposes a lot of truth about people. :3
Great job!

[Black Cat Fever]

People do like to do this, one up each other.

[KatiePie]

Powerful and strong. Great write.

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

fierce~ very strong write~ flaless composition with beautifully biting word string to relay the fristration!~

[Coyote Poetry]

Some folks need war to feel content. People with high energy can create a bomb of a relationship. I like this poem. The ending told the story. A outstanding poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[CherryBomb]

I like how Theres no main pinpoint to this poem.. which can make readers relate it into as many views possible... Great!