The Mist

9-3-10

Speaking the words that you seem to feel,
Feeling the words cut like cards before the deal
We never gave things a chance and that's where we failed,
No wonder our hearts saw one another and bailed
The next time of which I gather there's none,
Should of been relaxation and a bit of fun
Never will we know that a deeper friendship did exist,
We're both just shadows that shall fade into the mist.

Reviews

[Aimee Mahathy]

Wow, I can definitely relate to this. And I think this is a point that most need to acknowledge. People give up on things like relationships too easily. Divorces and falling apart of friendships too. I've seen it happen way too many times to count.
I liked the mirror effect of the first two lines.
Great job!

[Poetic Beauty]

This is a sad and longing poem

[Black Cat Fever]

A moment comes and that moment left to go on by. That's where regrets often come from. Nice work.

[Art Sun]

nice work Stacy...

[Ruth]

Take the moment when it arrives, not always easy at the time though!
Great poem
xx

[Coyote Poetry]

Those opportunities lost in the mist will always haunt us.I like the feel and emotion of your words. A very good ending to a outstanding poem.
Coyote

[An owl on the moon]

In the richness of your expressions you bring about the painful feelings of love and loss... There is so much beauty here, yet a deep longing in the looking back. So powerful... the last line is haunting...

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

truly touches the reader~ the lines undulate in smooth sadness~