Struck Out

Nowhere to run,
Nowhere to go
Nowhere to hide,
Nothing to show
How does it feel??
How do you know??
How do you deal??
How really low.......
How can you take from others,
Crudely and with malice
They're your sisters and brothers,
You are WAY TO callous
Give back to others,
Don't be so damn greedy
Screw your "ho hum's" and "druthers",
There are others who are needy
So take this as a point from me to you,
I have stated to you, my case
YOU are not the center of attention dude,
It's a level playing field & you struck out.....HA...You're not even on a base.

Reviews

[JENY]

I couldn’t make out the plot actually…
But it is clear that lines..
Exhorts to be unselfish….
To make free oneself from…from the clutches of one’s own ego….
I would like to know the context…
Perhaps I can dive deeper in the meaning behind the lines….

[Black Cat Fever]

Life doesn't always center around those who think it does. There are other people out there just as needy. I think you did a outstanding job on this poem.

[Coyote Poetry]

A very strong poem. Direct and to the point. I like the strong lines and the ending. A outstanding poem. No weakness in your words.
Coyote

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The start is sharp and quick and draws you in..tight rhyme..I wish you have continued along those lines as the end loses its punch a little..

[Robyn]

The beginning few lines of this poem really draw the readers attention