Stupid Is Me

You should of f*cking told me......you should of told me you were going for good....

It's happening once more my friend,
This time I fear that it's truly the end
I have no hope left that you're still here,
I'm beyond the point of scared
If you left and I think you did,
Then others will cheer and I don't kid
However my heart is breaking as if hit with a pipe,
All the pieces are being shattered as I type
Why wouldn't you say something, why did you just go,
I can't take this pain anymore and now it's painfully known
Once more you had your way with winning this stupid game,
Screw you for hurting me again and to hell with me for letting you do the same.

Reviews

[Poetic Beauty]

The flow is a little shaking in place but the raw emotion comes shining through. It is amazing how we can love some with everything we have and hate them at the same time. Although I can never stay mad at my only true love for more than a couple of hours.

[Black Cat Fever]

How painful relationships can be. I sure feel the pain deep in this one.

[RDOriginal]

This poem is full of emotion and anger. There's such venom here it's almost intimidating.

I think the title is particularly striking as it and the final line reveal that this isn't just a rant about someone else, there's also a large element of self-blame here.

Content wise I think this poem is a little patchy. You have some good turns of phrase such as, 'Screw you for hurting me again and to hell with me for letting you do the same' which positively oozes anger and resentment. However, there are some awkward parts, 'my heart is breaking as if hit with a pipe' - I can see where you're trying to go with the impression of hurt but in terms of imagery it's a little confused (perhaps we've all read 'like a knife through the heart' one too many times and you didn't want to write a cliche and I'm complaining because you've done something different!)

On the whole this poem conveys the message of anger very well but to me it needs a little more tempering before it becomes the lethal blade it could be.

[Inci]

the poem is nice and has a flow but that breaks in the last line...it'll be great if u rhyme something with go...otherwise great indeed

[Ruth]

Numbed and intense wording hon
A great poem that leaves the reader a little timid lol
Good piece
xx

[Awdures]

The rawness that I've grown to know and love hits me once again in this poem. Reminds me of believe it or not a work I read of Sylvia Plath's a few weeks ago. Anger is a good emotion to express and let go in poetry it certainly works for you here :)

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

this is a cathartic write~ the very first steps to acceptance and letting go~very well expressed!~

[Coyote Poetry]

A very strong poem of disappointment. I like the last line. You are on the right direction with that attitude. A very good poem.
Coyote