Are You Gone??

7-10-10...have you been gone 3 days?? Are you coming back or have you gone off to die.....without me....??

As I drove home through clouded glass I see,
The road that lies ahead and is lit by others beams
My mind wanders through the songs that play on the CD,
Everything screams your name to me
A feeling rushes over me like the warmth of the heater,
Something feels wrong and I don't want to believe it could occur
I arrive home without even realizing and then I shut off the engine,
I am in the house now alone and full of thoughts of sin
I complete my nightly tasks and lay within the bed,
I close my eyes semi tight and you're all that's in my head
Have you left for good or is this a mere guess,
I keep going over the invite to your home a week back or less
Something is wrong and I am scared,
The nightmares kick in where you are in fact gone and I was not prepared
A good bye is not as simple as two words falling from ones lips,
Maybe this is for the best though even though I have a heart that dropped into a pit
If in fact you have left and are not coming back forever,
Then maybe it's best we didn't see one another as I might of let go; never.

Reviews

[RDOriginal]

Although this is a poem ostensibly about loss it also has a heavy dose of uncertainty. The uncomfortable reality of never being able to say goodbye is perhaps the strongest theme in this poem.

Technically I'm left wondering whether this piece might be better as prose rather than in poem form. Although you've chosen to use free verse the restrictions on size that a poetic form suggests gives little opportunity to fully expand on the emotions being felt. As a reader we're left to fill in a lot of gaps ourselves and it might have been more effective to dispense with some of the narrative and explore the many emotions more thoroughly.

Despite my reservations about the actual choice of form this poem still does an effective job of telling a story and perhaps making the reader think about what might make someone walk away without saying goodbye.

[Black Cat Fever]

The pain of being in love, how can anyone think love is wonderful when its so full of pain and uncertainty. Its heaven and its hell.

[Awdures]

Really moving, and again your honesty makes people face head on the strength of emotion here.

It's horrible having to let go without saying farewell

[Inci]

Beautifully written...especially the last 2 lines ....the inner turmoil is very well brought out

[Ruth]

This is so sad :(
Moving in a way that makes the reader address sadness and loss!
Lovely poem :)
xx

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

a poignant relay of sorrow and loss~ how painful when there comes to be absence without even a goodby~ powerful poem~

[Coyote Poetry]

Sometime hard to accept loss. Takes a kick in the head to find peace and comfort again. I could feel the loneliness and emotion in your words. A powerful poem. Thank you.
Coyote