I Am She

I Am She
Feelings of butterflies in my stomach when you smile at me,
After you kiss my lips I fall to my knees
You help me back up metaphorically,
Then you tell me that I am the one who you love and then I see
It's almost beautiful in a way known as crazy,
A thing of the this magnitude is almost insanity
You knew it was going to ultimately be,
Us together for all of eternity,
I shall always be yours perpetually.
Copyright 7-7-2010 Stacy Perry

Reviews

[RDOriginal]

This poem really catches the feelings of love when it's new and all encompassing.

There are some nice human touches in this poem which keep it from straying too far into over sentimentalism or cliche. Adding 'metaphorically" to the third line hints at the narrators need to pull the punch of the image and the acknowledgement that it's 'almost beautiful' and perhaps 'crazy' also take the edge off some of the other lines.

I'm not entirely convinced by the rhyme schem used here. It seems a little at odds with the rhythm when read aloud. However this might just be a case of personal preference.

Overall I'd say this is a positive and genuine poem and if it's written from first hand experience you are a lucky person. Enjoy it!

[Black Cat Fever]

Deeply romantic and tender too. Very positive and uplifting.

[Ruth]

A lovely poem hon!
All your work has some message along the line, wonderfulxx

[Coyote Poetry]

A very beautiful and positive poem. We must tell the people we love and care for they are our life and dreams. I like the last line. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Fran Marie]

A great rhyming tone to this piece, could be read from last line to first

and still be effective~

Nicely DonE!!

[Poetic Beauty]

I love the flow and the form of this poem. The beauty in this poem is that two people love each other so much. great write.

[zombiikillah666]

really good. (:
i like this.

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

beautifully drawn emotions of love and commitment~

[Awdures]

Lovely use of gentle rhyme makes the reader feel like they are being gently rocked whilst reading. I'm really enjoying this softer side of you! Seems someone managed to touch and keep that heart of yours :)