Wise Mind

Wise Mind
A seeker of inner beauty,
A seeker of inner lust
A seeker of inner truth
A seeker of inner trust,
If you can find solace within
If you can find solace without,
If you can find solace in between
If you can find solace about,
I dare you to locate what has been missed
I want you to see what has been sought,
I need you to find what has been lost
I desire you to finally give me that kiss,
So much have we learned from one another over time
So much I have learned from you and our past,
So much you have taken from me in the present
So much we have to enjoy in the future as I have faith it shall last,
Take my hand and walk with me as the sun goes down
Holding onto everything with a grin and not a frown,
Never look back for too long as you might get caught in the wake
We'll keep moving forward from this point on as each moment as it comes we shall take.
Copyright 7-4-2010 Stacy Perry

Reviews

[RDOriginal]

This is an interesting study into what we might aspire to in order to have a 'wise mind'. In purpose it's slightly reminiscent of 'If' by Rudyard Kipling which introduces a similar list of qualities one might aspire to in life in general.

When reading this poem I was initially struck by the use of four lines using the same initial phrase. I became quite a fan of it but then the pattern stopped half way through and to me that weakens the piece a little. It's possibly personal taste but when you lull the reader into a pattern it's often more powerful to break the pattern at a point where the tone changes substantially or maybe at the end with some sort of revelation.

Regarding the content I like the way you begin with abstract aspirations: things that we might apply as a general outlook to maintain a wise mind. This then becomes the minds approach to a relationship. Narrowing from the abstract to the specific gives structure to the poem and it's as if you're focusing the readers attention as the work progresses.

This is a good inspirational poem with a lot we can take out of it.

[Inci]

wonderfully written and wonderfully presented..the poem almost looks like a pyramid

[Black Cat Fever]

Enjoy life while your alive and can, very important message and something worth doing.

[Poetic Beauty]

This is a wonderful poem. I love the form you used for this poem and the flow is easy to follow.

[Ruth]

Take every moment and live it!
Beautifully said love!
xx

[Awdures]

Grasp every moment of happiness that this world throws at you with gusto! I agree wholeheartedly having been stuck somewhere rather dark for many years, my lust being reignited recently-for life that is :)

Excellent poem. Really honest and I thoroughly enjoyed the reading!

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

you map the heart with elegant care in this lovely creation~

[Coyote Poetry]

A wise man or woman go slow and easy to grasp every sweet and good moment. Those who rush and take without caring need to be kept away. I like the wisdom in this poem. Sometimes takes many years to understand what is good for us. A outstanding poem.
Coyote