"OW"

I had a very vivid dream,
It wasn't a judgmental one or so it seems
I was a person in love with you,
You were a person in love with me too
Then came a time when you walked out on me,
I was so blinded by our love that I couldn't see
There are so many troubles within ourselves right now,
That there is no fixing them as of yet which leaves me one word and that is "OW".

Reviews

[RDOriginal]

Despite its brevity this poem has plenty of punch that I'm sure many readers can identify with.

The way in which each line grows perhaps reflects that at first everything was simple but as time passed the relationship became more complicated and finally broke down leaving two very troubled people. The only criticism I would make is that the final line seems just a little too long, perhaps contracting "that is" to "that's" might fit the scheme a bit better?

This poem paints a sorry picture of how things can go wrong in a relationship and in this state there's little that can be said other than "Ow".

[Black Cat Fever]

Love hurts, love wounds, love can do a lot worse yet it can be all the opposites. Must try to heal and move on.

[Awdures]

It's a sorry state when a relationship ends with the use of the word 'ow'. I'm sure mine ended with a few swear words...but I digress. I love the way that you write straight from the heart. Some of what is said isn't dignified but its not meant to be. It's raw and full of emotion.

I like it :)

[zombiikillah666]

gooooood write....!!!!!!!!!

[Coyote Poetry]

The damn "Ow" of life leave us wounded and hurt for a long time. A very strong short poem. I like the complete poem. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Ruth]

Well, thats one word a lot of people can relate too lol
Cool poem love
xx