Room Mates

Wanting something better for myself,
You have always been the one or so I thought
Wanting someone who loves me for who I am,
You have shown me emotions that could only be store bought
If I ran to the edge of the world, then I might not come back,
I know you don't want to lose me for good my dear
I gather that maybe running isn't going to be the answer ever again,
No matter how angry we are or happy we shall stay together and near
Amazingly you make demands and say I am a selfish b***h,
I agree on the latter but you can't deny you're an a*****e in your own right
Can't tell anymore that we are soul mates for this life time,
Is there going to ever be an end to this over seven year itch??
Let's just face the facts we are with one another for purposes of a line drawn in the sand,
If we admit it now maybe we can salvage a friendship out of this
So give me a kiss on the cheek and I shall return the same with a tear that falls,
As even though we are together, the separation of our lives is killing me in ways you'll never understand.

Reviews

[RDOriginal]

This poem has real tragedy to it and speaks volumes about a relationship that has just soured and grown cold. There isn't any hatred here, just the sad recognition that love has become one directional and sadness is a daily reality.

My favourite line in this poem, and the one that seems to sum everything up so well is, "Let's just face the facts we are with one another for purposes of a line drawn in the sand". This suggests that the relationship is based around a truce not to argue or protest. The line suggests cold logic, not emotion. However, there is still a feeling of loss and regret revealed by the narrator when she says, "So give me a kiss on the cheek and I shall return the same with a tear that falls". She's clearly hurting desperately about the state of things but is powerless to escape.

This is a tragic and sad poem and as a reader it makes you want to reach out to the narrator and tell her that the relationship is either over or it needs fixing by both parties. This twilight world of "room mates" just doesn't work.

[Coyote Poetry]

When the walls begin to fall apart. It is hard to stop. From lover to room mates rarely work. A powerful poem. You ask many questions that time must answer. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Black Cat Fever]

This is very moving and painful. Relationships so often end up in tragedies such as this. All we can do is try to heal, move on and learn from it all. I think that's sometimes the hardest part, to learn from a failed relationship so we don't make the same mistakes again.

[Art]

the harsh reality of life and relationshipa

[Ruth]

This is another honest, moving piece:)
I like your structure a lot hon, really good piece
xx

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

I adore the serrated edge of words~ the sharp blade of content~ the severity is beautifully balanced with interspersed prisms of lush sincerity~