Fallen One

It's almost like you are holding me down,
You sit upon your thrown and stone me with a frown
I look back up at you so high and mighty or so you think,
I shall not take the goblet from you for that fateful drink
You do not fool me your majesty of hate,
You shall not control me or use me as bait
I am not your whipping boy nor your scape goat,
You will not catch me trying to swim across your gator filled moat
There is no lore of which you possess,
That could ever tell the tale that I am obsessed
It seems you have failed my dear king,
As much as I love you I shall not kiss the ring
Then as your pedestal falls crumbling down,
I am the one left standing holding your crown
I dare not place it on my head for that is how you got lost,
Actually that is the way I ended up double crossed
You told me you loved me and then turned me around,
A dagger to the back was what can be found
I am not taking the scars from you anymore,
You have fallen hard my dear love and hit yourself hard on the floor
So to you I shall say what I always have desired;
Only a fool believes he rules me within the kingdom of love and being admired.

Reviews

[NSisifo]

Only crits:
thrown should be throne
Second to last sentence, you don't really need a semicolon, but I think a regular colon would work.

"So to you I shall say what I have always desired:
Only a fool..."

Nice way of showing how a pawn can end up being the last one standing.

[Bhavya Kaushik]

very strong and powerful piece, I specially like the ending line the most.

[Ruth]

It takes people a while to realise we are all our own master but there comes a time when we have to! Hugs xx

[KatiePie]

"You sit upon your thrown and stone me with a frown"
That line took my breath away, and I am in love with it ^-^
Through reading this I saw it play in my head so vividly, and it flowed flawlessly.
You are so amazingly talented, I admire you!
Keep up the good work

[Coyote Poetry]

Your words are true. We need to be equal and be one with our number two. Life is give and take. I like the last line. Great wisdom in them words. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Tate Morgan]

You sit upon your thrown and stone me with a frown
You do not fool me your majesty of hate,
Some true wonderswent into your thoughts for this

[Black Cat Fever]

Coming from a strong and powerful voice. Learning to not be used and learning to be strong are hard lessons sometimes but well worth it. Superb job on this.

[Wicahpi]

I really like this write very much.
So far, my favorite of yours.
Well done! :)

[Fallacy Pharmacy]

Absolutely amazing-I'm lost for words, this is fantastic! I always comment on the rhyming, and I will now-it's brilliant! Keep on writing poems like this, you're unbelievably talented!

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Never place another on a pedestal, they'll only end up falling on your head and crushing your heart. Great insight to this piece, love it.