Revive

If I stand to lose this fight,
Then you should tell me now this very night
If you shall still walk away,
Then you should let me know this very day
If I'll slumber then wake to an empty bed,
You should give me your excuse in this time ahead
If you plan to leave me now,
You should explain and tell me how
If you are hiding something from me,
You should try to explain it, can't you see??
So if this disease is eating you alive,
Let me help you through it maybe you I can revive.

Reviews

[Bhavya Kaushik]

So if this disease is eating you alive,
Let me help you through it maybe you I can revive.

I absolutely loved the rhyme and the overall flow of this piece a lot..
It is also very inspiring, thanks a lot for sharing your thoughts here with us...

[Coyote Poetry]

Poem is very good. In the struggle to lose and win in love and emotion. Sometime one person must bend so there is a opening for forgiveness and a new beginning. I loved your ending. Sometime we must forgive and leave a open door.
Coyote

[zombiikillah666]

oh yea. good write. (:

[Wicahpi]

It would always be nice to have a 'heads up'
when bad things are to come, unfortunately,
usually this does not happen; but then,
would we truly want to know?

[Ruth]

Yearning connection, to be "let in"
Awesome work!
xx

[Fallacy Pharmacy]

I agree with Kit Kat, the rhyming is amazing, and the poem flows very easily. You get your idea across very easily. Yet again, another great poem.

[deeps]

Wonderful flow and rhyme scheme
I enjoyed reading this.