The Answer

jMg

I can't walk on the egg shells anymore,
The cuts are deep and to the core
No matter how much I love you inside,
You'll have something to say back and I must abide
Being without you was killing me,
I used to be sad in this unknown certainty
Now I simply sit back and stare at the sky,
You hate to love me, I hate to love you......we both now know why.

Reviews

[Sweet_pale_cacophony]

The brevity of the poem suits the content...it is one of those poems where a point is made and left as it should be without using words not necessary..
I can't walk on the egg shells anymore,
The cuts are deep and to the core
though somehow i feel this line doesn't fit in well...why would walking on egg shells cut deep to the core..i understand poetry is about analogies..metaphors which can b quirky at times but it is a suggestion if you could write something more apt as a comparison.

[kypruss]

creative and original

[Angel Veselinov]

Great poem full of emotions keep up the good work Thanks for sharing

[zombiikillah666]

mhm. can relate. i like it. (:
its nice to put our feelings
down, even if its not original.
dont worry bout others,
writing and putting it out there,
for me anyways, makes it seem somewhat better. (:

[Libby McKeown]

I know this is a very personal piece, but I have to say that it lacks originality. There are billions of poems about the struggle with love, but the goal is to say it in a different way, or perfectly capture the feeling without cliches. Needs some work.

[emmah]

the anguish and pain at the impossibility of the situation and the impossibility of a resolution come through in a very stark manner - raw and exposed. "I can't walk on egg shells anymore" - a crisp start to a crisp verse.
love the end too. nice one!

[Art]

relationships take so much work don't they...

nice work...

[Ruth]

Realisation is never easy, you have voiced that really well here xx

[Mari Sloan]

Life is tremendously unfair--but it IS life. Wonderfully stated angst, but after the next love-hate-sparring match, you may want to move on. LOL. I married a man I felt like that about and it stops being fun after the first ten years.

:-) Happily remarried to now.
(The rating thing is going to get boring. If I like something, I just go all out.)

[Coyote Poetry]

The internal struggle in the poem is very strong. Love and emotion can twist us up. Hard to know right from wrong. Poem is strong and left a open ending. A outstanding poem.
Coyote