With A Kiss

Times move on as I stand still,

Sadly enough I didn't get my fill

All I wanted was unconditional love,

You never gave that so now I'm free as a dove

I gather I will let you go as I have no choice,

It's too bad that it ended with me having no voice

If I would of been able to have a say in this,

I would of simply said I love you with a kiss.

Reviews

[~Daugher of the King~]

This is also short, but once again, very beautifully written! :) I especially like the fourth, sixth, seventh, and eighth lines. There is just a couple of grammatical corrections, though in the seventh and eighth lines, it should be "would have" instead of "would of." ;) Once again, I'm not trying to be a pest, so I hope you don't take that the wrong way. I'm only trying to help. :)

Also, I can definitely relate to this poem. I feel your emotions in this one, and they relate to mine. It's beautiful! :)

[StacyPerry]

I take criticism as something to help me, so please never feel bad about giving me constructive criticism. I am pleased that people read so closely. :o)

[Wicahpi]

the last line should say it all, when nothing
else it to be said.

[deeps]

This is powerful I Must agree
but very well written.

[Ruth]

This is intensely powerful, sad and touching xx

[Coyote Poetry]

A powerful poem. We try to give all. But we are left to wonder why things falls the wrong way. I like the gentle movement of your words. Ending was outstanding. A excellent poem.
Coyote