My Bloody Tears

If someone wants to use this in a SONG, then let me know......I have no problem with it.

As we shed bloody tears for all the loss for all the sorrow,
we come upon the dark to hide ourselves in until tomorrow
We shall never think more than twice about the past or then we'd wallow,
As we shed our bloody tears we've learned to live each day as our last with our hearts that are so hallow.

Reviews

[Art Sun]

interestingly written thoughts,,,

[StacyPerry]

This is meant to be a chorus to a tune, it wasn't meant to be a poem. I very rarely write lyrics as I agree it seems like a long run on sentence, but if I get a tune in my head and can manage to find the words inside of me......I say screw it and write it. LOL

[GhostWoman]

I like it, but If I can make suggestion I think that some of the lines are a bit to long (lol run-on sentence) Still good all in all though.

[deeps]

I agree with Poppysilver on this.
Well written

[Ruth]

Tears can be cleansing, a chance to heal, nicely written xx