Mystic Lake

It may make no sense but please read!! :D <3

I watched as your petals fly up, up, up into the night sky they said this happens when roses die I used it think it was a lie   Those petals swirled up with the stars Look up and see, there they are! Your spirit was at peace. So free. Roses and stars reflecting off the deep blue sea   Shimmering deep blue sea Where is that key? Will you release me from this hellish sea?   Crashing waves pressing my body down. Sink to the depths preying to be found. I want to dance and laugh with the stars that sing Release me please so i may fly on my wing.

my wings so white   they are so bright like shining beacons followed without reason

What reasons follow as I fly though the sky That question follows like shadows , never answered as to why. They just follow my spirit- so free yet so trapped Looking for places not yet marked on our map

That big old map, yet to be marked   with many hidden paths which one shall i take' perhaps one that travel near a lake

Magic and crystal clear Sparkling water nestled here Lilly's and ferns- where do we go? Back to that place from long ago   that magical place, filled with happiness and misery shinning crystal tears Hidden with lost fear

Lost fears echo of the valleys walls, And those tears - they glisten in the sun and call. Although the happiness surrounding is beauty and bliss, We need this pain or else it would be of miss . They once told be Roses die, I always believed it was a lie. When those petals fly, watch them with your majestic eyes. Our pain is where we move on from, it won’t be long. So take my hand, and well make a stand.   Make a stand for the Valleys, the lake, the ferns and the sea. The roses, our spirits, the flowers the key. Path written and magic will be complete. Your spirit will shine with blinding heat.

Author's Note

This poem is written with one of my writer cafe bros! Please befriend the person who wrote half of this epicness ------> http://www.writerscafe.org/Jakepeters5014
And help me force him to put his writing up :D Ignore grammer, spelling and general weirdness ^^ and please reveiw!! ^^

Reviews

[Keith]

This is great work, loved it. So nice to find another Aussie, I am of course shattered that I just lost a very special one. My sympathies to those of you who were very close, she had touched me with her poems, I only found her a few weeks back but not hard to see that she was gifted. I take some small consolation that I made her laugh. Friends request coming.

[GorgEOus NiGhtMarE]

Half of this poem was written by Jake Peters. Glad you enjoyed it :)
She was amazing. Thankyou :/

[The Nude Writer]

Very cool poem :) I think you did a fantastic job putting strong emotion into this one :)

[GorgEOus NiGhtMarE]

thankyou :)

[KurKota]

I know these reviews are supposed to be positive and feel goodies, but I am one that has to be honest and if you don't want to see how I honestly react to this delete this review now....
I really can't say I respond to this in anyway but being anxious for it stop. It was way tooo long for what was being said....and it was too swirling in the process. Sorry, but that is just how I responded to it.

[GorgEOus NiGhtMarE]

Thankyou of your thoughts :) when we were writing it we were just having fun and didn't really think of what we where writing ... At one point even we were confused haha

[KurKota]

Thank you for your clarification. I really didn't want to be negative about it, but I just had to state how I felt, in order for other reviews to have integrity. I didn't want to sound harse, because I really do like your writing. Thank you for your understanding.

[GorgEOus NiGhtMarE]

Thats okay. :) There has been so many good reveiws that they would loose meaning if you didn't get a negitive one to work off now and then. :P

[Chris]

I chose to read this one because you asked. I felt this was a collab before you said it though the styles aren't too dissimilar. The flow was consistent for each. Who edited the work - tied the stanzas together?

[GorgEOus NiGhtMarE]

My friend Jake added the first stanza and we just took turns adding stanzas untill the work felt complete :) we never really edited the work excepts for minor spelling mistakes

[Chris]

ah... Some collabs have one or another of the set positioning the words and melding the flow into one intertwined piece. Yours felt intertwined...

[Lupus Kaos]

I don't think it makes no sense. It was like a trip. I do not know to where, but a nice one. It is nice and I think that you (and the other person you wrote it with) have very good imagination. The poem made me forget some things in my mind torturing me, for a moment, and I thank you for that.

[GorgEOus NiGhtMarE]

Your welcome :) I'm glad you liked it ^^