sometimes

straightforward.

sometimes
the things you (don't) say
leave me hanging
off
the
edges
of
question marks.

 

and I wonder:
would you
even want to
kiss
the shells of my
eyelids,
only closed as offerings?

 

did you know that
there are veins
inside?
that my
heart
beats
there
too?

Author's Note

I don't usually write poetry with line breaks.

Reviews

[Pratik Bhandari]

simple yet elegant !!!!! It has indeed the deeper feelings expressed!!!Nice one!!!

[Cassie Black]

I like the shortness and the way you simply expressed such strong feelings, I really love this poem

[Sourodip]

Unique and at its best.....

[...]

I want to tell you that I love this poem in an original way, but I'm not sure there is one. So I'm just going to say:

I. Love. This. Poem. :]

[Hello, Goodbye]

continue on.. good stuff and captivating structure...

[Ashley]

Question is spelt wrong. I love the stylism and rhyme. The imagery painted in the line "the shells of my eyelids" ect. give the poem originality and depth. well done!

[Luna]

I like it. its really cute and i think the questioning is really good. you are awesome at this style!

[xXx]

OMG .. awesome .. take, took me there .. love this!

[poetic soul]

but i guess u shud try doing it often...its nice!! sounds good...i liked the read...but sounds incomplete..."hanging with question marks" like u said...but well said...

:) Love,
Krishna