dont end your life

What is everyone doing sitting around ,

Doing nothing for life,

Just sitting lazily,

Common get up,

Lets go drive four wheeler,

Lets do something,

Sitting depressed isent healthy hun,

Please tell me what is wrong,

I can help,

Please don’t push me away,

You will be loved,

You are loved,

Please don’t jump.

Reviews

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The piece has a very powerful meaning to it. It is very inspirational. Someone trying to save the life of another (please don't push me away, you will be loved, please don't jump). However, there seemed to have been several grammatical errors. If you fix those and structure the poem a bit more it could be a very powerful piece.