Let Go

I am new at song writing. I know it is not the greatest, but I was feeling emotional and I decided to try, because music is my passion despite my inexperience.

Verse One

Where do you stand?
Will our feelings grow?
I don't want to know
I don't want to know

Maybe I just want to hide within these walls
Everything is a little turned around
The tears just shower down
I thought I was so safe, so sound

Just the other day
It all seemed so intact
I should have known it wouldn't last
Was it all an act?

Chorus

Oh, we all fall down
We all fall
Down
Two crowds make one disaster
Bigger than ourselves
Who knew? It crumbles faster
I can't bear this all alone
This place is a little too monochrome
We all fall down
We all fall
Down

Verse Two

Your back to me
A harsh, critical uncertain light
I can't seem to surrender to the night
With a conscience, so full of fright

I could scream to the silence in your eyes
You aren't mine, and I know that but still
So sudden is your poison pill
Is this what we call free will?

Won't you face me?
Just a moment, just a small glance
I am taking a fearful chance
And this is not my usual stance...


Chorus

Last Verse

Foolish like the b*****d
Who created time
This false feeling first feels utterly sublime
But it is more just like a victimless crime

Chorus

Reviews

[dukovan]

trick i've learned to song writing is (not that Im an expert at all) is to do variations of the initial inpirations, switch up words, arrange lines and stanzas, write completely new lines that are stating the same thing, just in a different light. develop everything from one common root, the song writes itself in a way when it works. You also develop more texture in the lyrics and you begin to learn more about what the song is.

[Everett DeValle]

I Love your lyrical flow, with the message that everyone is susceptible of playing the fool, once or many times in their lives. Excellent write.

[Valentine]

I am no song writer but I find you have some terrific lines in this piece..How does it sound to music??Valentine

[roy mccarthy]

great piece,song,
well done :)

[Vinod Kumar U K]

Beautiful write ...

[Rae]

Not bad! I know you say that you're inexperienced but if you keep at it I know that you can only get better. Keep writing!!

[bobby]

As if your writing and crying and sobbing and writing. Fresh emotions often have the most venom "the posions of the heart".

[Brytt]

Very nice. I would take out the last two lines of chorus, but it's your song. If that has its place there, keep it.

Lovely work.

[Enigma]

For the first attempt, its pretty good. Keep it up. :)