Voices of Élan vital

Voices, tender and callous
in silence, shouting
These people of the world
The ones that I
shamefully discriminate
Lurking in my eyes
an evil
It fills me with fear
self-hatred, stupefaction
An imposter
and a shred of my being
who has always been
This is not child's play
In such youth
this matter was clustered
Into small
Innocent outbursts
It is now but a reverie, that quaint little child
Lost in time
Altruism, mixed with heavy breaths
It is the me
I desire
So wildly
A poseur
And a part of me
whom I cannot banish
she sits there
arms crossed, stern and resilient
projecting a filthy smirk
I don't recognize those eyes.
Allow me to be free of fury
Slimy, spreading
diseased
I desire
So wildly
To be, in whole
fragility over clenched fist
and stiff spine
If only to permeate the peace
I feel
If only to soften the misery
of those voices, tender
of those voices, sharp...

Reviews

[Alskar]

The first thing that slaps me across the face is that this speaker is extremely insecure. Again there seems to be a huge lack of trust and faith in the world around them. The speaker seems to be crying out for some sort of redemption or help from another, but their own issues of mistrust make it impossible. Because of this very well thought out premise, this poem is very good. The structure is a little erratic, but this could be mirroring the erratic thoughts of the speaker.

[Stella]

Great poem! I liked how dark this poem is and I found it to be very beautiful. My favorite part was :
Lurking in my eyes
an evil
It fills me with fear
self-hatred, stupefaction

[SinnerInspired]

Scary yet powerful

[FallenHeroXx]

This is a really good piece. Strikes me to be a bit insecure but that just adds more to the poem in my opinion. Really great job!

[Vinod Kumar U K]

Beautiful write with honest nice..........

[LivingDeath]

Amazing piece. Each line brings the reader deeper and deeper into your words. It seems as if the person you are talking about in this piece is battling a war with herself and possibly not liking who she is yet wishing better days would come. I dunno, thats just my thoughts on it. Very good piece. Message me if you ever need someone to talk to.
~Ty

[trainwreck]

The last two lines really brought the whole poem together. Great job!

[Tasha]

I really liked this.
♥ Ta'Shandra

[Rae]

The title kinda went over my head a little bit, not gonna lie, but I very much enjoyed this poem. Keep writing!!