This Year Longing Eradicates Rectitude

There have been times
in this world
When
I have taken possession
of foreign histories
unknowingly

Small imprints struck heavy
This era is soiled and sad
Though there is a certain
unsullied delight
in seeking out
its candorish, sterling qualities
Curling out from musty nooks
in the most recondite of regions
The exigency
of staying true to positive forms
bashing itself against realism...

In admittance to my own grievances
concerning this matter
A sharp malfeasance
Hovering above my crown
Taunting me into false temerity
Those that hold me
deep in their hearts
shadowed by the shame
that I carry between my fingertips
a hushed and visceral disquiet
And a longing for atonement

Reviews

[Stella]

The words flow wonderfully , I love how unique the topics of your poems are. I loved this one especially since it told a story and your word choice really complimented your poem.

[trainwreck]

The flow was good, but the meaning is sometimes lost in the big words (pardon my expression). Still, you have made an interesting piece of art. I like that I have to dig for the deeper meaning in this.

[Absentee Reality Check]

I love the flow of this, even though i'm having a little trouble deciphering it, it does sound rather nice.

[Alskar]

This certainly is 'abstract'. In fact, it's so abstract I can't work out exactly what the message is, but maybe that's the point. From what I can gather in the last stanza, the speaker has a mistrust of people and the general the world around her. There's extensive vocabulary here and it's jam-packed with imagery, but to the average reader I can't help but feel this may do you a disservice. It's a little bit too up in the air and abstract for my personal tastes, but I can appreciate the effort and intelligence that has gone into this piece. The imagery is definitely of a great standard, but without a meaning to grasp onto I find it hard to say just how great it is.

[FallenHeroXx]

Fantastic!

[Vinod Kumar U K]

Nice rectified a lot....

[bobby]

So many times in this poem I stumbled over words I could not define in its context. I like big words and maybe if I get out my dictionary and study a bit I would understand the reason for them. But I haven't the time nor the proclivity to do so. lol ;)

[LivingDeath]

Very deep write shen, full of emotions that pour off the page. Is everything alright?

[Rae]

Very interesting piece. It made me feel something. Keep writing!!