Permanently Astral

Sanguinous soaked hands
spattered with juices
of my own heedless desire
to die

A heaviness in the air
binding my heart to the
Earth
softens slowly

My old breath eases
and falters
a fresh wave of existence
as my body drops
like tattered laundry on the floor

The weakness in my arms, legs, bones
dissolves like sugar in tea
I shed my fleshy cocoon as it degrades
a new strength
erupts within a fully astral me

A river in the sky
Quite an opposing image to that of Styx
Flowing with coruscating beads
Translucent, but oh so obviously present

An immersion
in fluid beatitude
Held in tune with
blind, but pansophical eyes
Oh, mellifluous mortality

Beyond
A conscious whirl
of beyond
What is next?

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

I like this poem. Type of poem you need time to read. Your use of language is amazing. I could break down each set of lines and create a powerful emotion.
"The weakness in my arms, legs, bones
dissolves like sugar in tea
I shed my fleshy cocoon as it degrades
a new strength
erupts within a fully astral me"
The above lines held me and create a wild vision. You are a very good writer. Thank you for sharing your outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Plagued Monumentally]

Wow. Thank you for the read request because this poem was so worth reading. Fantastic, captivating and mature. Love it!

[Lily Mae]

Just like butter melts in the heat..this melted into my mind.. I love it..x

[KAREN]

Great flow and great word use!

[IAmGhost120]

I like how you've broken up the poem into lines. The way you've done it is very natural and there are no awkward breaks. Very nice.

[OT]

ah love your use of language - "An immersion
in fluid beatitude
Held in tune with
blind, but pansophical eyes
Oh, mellifluous mortality" - clap, clap, clap! love "pansophical eyes" - you wield your pen well here - powerful and intense! and abstract of course - permanently astral in constellated poetics! nice!

[Carrion.]

big words ._.
but VERY good. deep, dark, and very strong. I love this.
I look forward toreading more(:

[FemmeSpookyCorpse]

This piece is deep, dark and strong. Your similies left me speechless, while the tale you've woven drew me further in. You've taken great care with your words and crafted them so lovingly that they just flow so beautifully...this is a fantastic piece and I love it! = ]

-Femme_Gothique (Brittany)

[Becky C Strukamp]

Outstanding poem. I totally agree with Coyote. He said it best, great use of language.

[Jibin]

I love this work. It has such a touching feelings. And the wordings are the best in it...
:)

[donny ingraham]

Amazing poem, great use of words, the details have me speechless