Permanently Astral

Sanguinous soaked hands
spattered with juices
of my own heedless desire
to die

A heaviness in the air
binding my heart to the
Earth
softens slowly

My old breath eases
and falters
a fresh wave of existence
as my body drops
like tattered laundry on the floor

The weakness in my arms, legs, bones
dissolves like sugar in tea
I shed my fleshy cocoon as it degrades
a new strength
erupts within a fully astral me

A river in the sky
Quite an opposing image to that of Styx
Flowing with coruscating beads
Translucent, but oh so obviously present

An immersion
in fluid beatitude
Held in tune with
blind, but pansophical eyes
Oh, mellifluous mortality

Beyond
A conscious whirl
of beyond
What is next?

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

I like this poem. Type of poem you need time to read. Your use of language is amazing. I could break down each set of lines and create a powerful emotion.
"The weakness in my arms, legs, bones
dissolves like sugar in tea
I shed my fleshy cocoon as it degrades
a new strength
erupts within a fully astral me"
The above lines held me and create a wild vision. You are a very good writer. Thank you for sharing your outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Robin]

a delicious vocabulary mixed with personal philosophy ~ words to savor

[alexis]

very good use of words.its amazing.very powerful emotion

[DearSweetAgony]

I love this poem. I felt like I was on a different planet while reading this.
This poem is very unique but in a very good way.
I enjoyed reading this write, great job.

[bobby]

I wanted to detact my favorite lines and then I couldn't separate them from the suceeding lines. Your words exploded off the page sweeping my imagination to exclaim outloud and catch myself feeling your awful pain if only a hint of it could be felt. I loved the use of your college size words that to other less daring writers would find other ways to define unimaginable expressions but you did it with precision. "The weakness in my arms, legs, bones dissolves like sugar in tea"
"I yelped after reading this powerfully extracted cry"

[Blue tailed kite]

This is a poem that teaches to be strong when we are at the weakest.
"I shed my fleshy cocoon as it degrades
a new strength
erupts within a fully astral me

A river in the sky
Quite an opposing image to that of Styx"

The poem has a positive message, we can find strength and evolve from our darkest moments.

[trainwreck]

This was really deep, which is rare on a site like this. Great job crafting this poem.

[Michael Davis]

Very abstract.

[Rae]

Great vocabulary, caught me with the first word. However, it's the meaning behind the words that really capture you and take you on a ride.

[Sukriti Suki]

Very deep, descriptive....thought provoking....nice!

[Sleeping Maiden]

Oh my gosh... this is like breath-taking. A loss of words I am... This poem is well written and just FANTASTIC! Great job! You're really talented. This piece reminds me of something in magick I've tried.. before. Nice poem though. I love it! Thank you for sharing.