Rag Doll

Faster, faster, faster
the heart is beating faster
conceptual "butterflies" flap
a blush, a smile, an inch away
slow-mo clock breaks thought to stay
No time, no time to ponder
on the wonders of the day
No time, no time
the lips are touching
conceptual "butterflies" flap away
slow-mo clock breaks thought to stay
a feeling gone, its miles lost
and numb, I'm numb, so numb of pain
kiss the lips that kiss the lips
afraid to break, to rip
It was skin, was lips, insensitive touch
in the absence of sweet and tender pain
no feeling in cold or wet of rain
ragdoll lays upon the bed
emotionless, empty, nothing else said
Thoughts run through the ragdoll mind
thoughts of pain, of laughter and lies
Having none or any of the kind
Comfortable lies
break these ties
::Absent life filled with lies and emotionless ties::
Faster, faster, faster
the heart is beating fast
and Ragdoll doesn't last
Just a thing of the past
Her soul is in the flask
out of which you drink, to make the feelings pass

Reviews

[Bonnie]

Wow this poem is amazing! I really like the way you contrasted the quick heartbeats with the silent clocks in the poem. I also like how you created the sudden shift in the second stanza where everything new and beautiful turns old and sour. The only suggestion that I would have, is to use fewer long, complex words because they tend to break up the flow of thought in the poem. Great job

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem is amazing. The pace of the poem was so good. It felt like a race. The description and detail create wild and crazy vision. I like when time is use in poetry. Minutes can seem like forever.
"no feeling in cold or wet of rain
ragdoll lays upon the bed "
The language and strong lines made this a pleasure to read. A outstanding poem. Thank you.
Coyote