MASTERY IN CREATION

See the surroundings, some thing special in almost every thing

Enough rain for one third land

From the clouds , the source -the sea.

The quantity varies -to scursity  ,

 Or over dosage - as to the area of the sea.

Hills, alternative, equalize the distribution,

Make vegetation lively.

Watch the waves , the back ward movements

Check the force of the speedy waves.

Birth and death paralise the numbers

No existence if one ceased.

The ready vegetation receives

Of what animals discharge ,

Opposite in the plants.

So accurate the distance of the sun,

The base of existence.

So dangerous , in both ways ,

If the position changes.

The salty water - the master digester,

Untold wealth in and out

Centre of hope of the multitude,

Still , no salty taste in the rain !

Sayed Thangal

Reviews

[Great Aunt Astri]

Yes indeed, we should all wonder at the glory of God's creation. The Life Death cycle is something some people are afraid of.
I am glad there is
'Still, no salty taste in the water'
Very moving poem.

[SAYED THANGAL]

Thank you for your encouragement.

[Briana O'Connor]

Very vivid imagery. I could see each word and feel emotion pouring from the page. Very well done. Thank you for sharing.

[SAYED THANGAL]

thanks a lot dear, all the best

[Zahra]

Good observation, nicely woven poem.

[SAYED THANGAL]

thanks dear for your lovely words

[TL Boehm]

yes, so enjoy the cyclical approach this takes. All things are interdependent. Well penned .

[SAYED THANGAL]

thanks a lot dear for your positive feed back

[Violet's Run]

this comes from a man that is close to the Earth and cherishes the things of the Earth. it also denotes
the mysticism that is life. In this poem you actually have a cadence a rhythm going on like min cycles of life that it is retelling. A narrative het not .. and it is just a beautiful, subtle, oh so subtle lesson and questioning.
excellent there is a ton of growth in this writing big change with the rhythm fitting the English and making it musical
susan

[SAYED THANGAL]

you are so touched by this poem, I think. Really this poem is for thinking, over and over, then only we can grasp the real ''strength'' of God. thanks a lot for your sharing
sayed

[Debbie_Philly]

This is very beautiful... love the in depths description.... felt as though I was there with you... well done !!

[SAYED THANGAL]

''felt as though with me'' bravo , accept very gladly, thanks dear,

[Daniel Dawes]

Really enjoyed this write and great imagery/ creativity. Thanks for the write :)

[SAYED THANGAL]

thanks a lot for your feed back

[Bowers]

This is so great! so vivid, dear friend... the only thing I found questionable, is the word "paralise" in line nine, was this intentional or is it supposed to be paralyzed?either way, this is a lovely poem!

[SAYED THANGAL]

here I used the word as ''equalize'' , but most readers are confused , so I decide now to change the word, thanks for the review

[Bowers]

your so welcome! I do understand where you were going though! sorry about the confusion!

[Frieda P]

Lovely imagery here, there's an abundance of beauty that surrounds us each and every day.

Birth and death paralise the numbers, did you mean paralyze Sayed?

[SAYED THANGAL]

it mean equalize , if there is no death the world would be over crowded , life is impossible, and if no birth, no one would be here. thanks for your review

[Frieda P]

Ahh, that's a new one on me, thanks Sayed and my pleasure always.

[Vidya Bacchus]

A lovely write about our blessed rain.Well penned :)

[SAYED THANGAL]

thanks, it's all about the creativity of Almighty

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome Sayed :)

[SAYED THANGAL]

thanks, it's all about the creativity of Almighty