Welcome Death

the fear of death is greater than death itself...

withered leaves, t'was so plush,

stripped canopies, once merry mush,

the light of life, very faint,

everything gone, only darkness remains.

the tilted hourglass, empty now,

time to take your final vow,

a last, shaky, wheezy breath,

extinguished by the hands of death.

the ever victorious conqueror awaits,

none have bettered, none can evade

but, my dear, never fight,

just surrender, it'll be all right.

flood yourself with memories,

the beauty of life, you will see

close your eyes and you'll believe

death is the start of another eve.

burnt to ashes, your body may rot,

but the thought of you will definitely not

your spirit, your soul will always remain

never forgotten nor in vain

welcome death, tis not the end

only the beginning, my merry friend,

let it come when it must

go and get back your life's lost lust!

 

Reviews

[Stonz P.]

This is certainly different from what I have read from you... the imagery is also good and the flow is there but since you write in meter and rhyme, the meter is shaky.. but I don't think it would affect my opinion as I do not practice it..
Good write..

[Surya pradha]

thanks a lot!

[ayesha gupta]

its true. death will come only once so, we should not fear.
nicely penned

[Surya pradha]

glad you agree. thanks!

[Fatima]

Very good writing, I enjoyed reading it.

[Surya pradha]

thanks a bunch!

[Sami Khalil]

A very powerful poem on death. You pen with excellence...:)....................

[Surya pradha]

thanks for the praise!

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:).......

[Arshia]

Death is the start of another eve..absolutely correct. A very thought provoking poem with a wonderful message! Well written Surya :)

[Surya pradha]

glad you enjoyed it, Arshia!

[hardeep sabharwal]

Death is a theme, which always attracts, and fear of death are more suitable for literature as a theme, it is an interesting read here and you have done your job nicely
thankyou

[Surya pradha]

glad you liked it. thnx for the appreciation!

[M.A.Rathore]

According to Hindu mythology, soul never dies. It is body that dies and soul leaves its old and tattered clothes for wearing a new one. Its journey is simple from one body to the other. What chages is the only body of different human beings from insect to man. Death is only the gate to transfer soul into another body. As birth is painful so also death has some stroke yet the ultimate purpose is successful.
In this poem you clearly show your treatment with this universal truth that death shall come and we have to suffer its stroke. So it is better to be bold and being positive should accept the absolute reality.
The lively description of this event is drawn pictorially. Each and every echo the wonderful meaning to tell meaninglessness of bemoning at time of death because all the things will renew all that was with departing soul...
Thanks for sharing so nice a poem...

[Surya pradha]

you're welcome sir!

[M.A.Rathore]

Thanks..please do review my essay POLITENESS HAS LOST IN THE WESTERN WORLD

[rae]

This is really good and works really well. Death is a theme I always enjoy to see explored and you've really captured it here.

[Surya pradha]

thanks for the praise!

[Sanjh]

Nice work Surya. It's something different than usual.
Well thought and excellently penned...:)

[Surya pradha]

thanks bro!

[harishbabu]

nice poem with a philosopher's touch...depicting the immortality of the soul. nice diction too. good luck boy

[Surya pradha]

thanks a lot, sir!