The Lagoon

The Lagoon

A Poem by spence
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A collaboration between myself and my six year old daughter, Chloe.

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Blue sky above the waterfall

Plummets to lagoon

Giraffes graze upon

The clifftop

In the sunny afternoon

Flora flourishes

All around

Giving life to fauna

Birds fly high

Across the sky

Fishes swim the water

© 2010 spence


Author's Note

spence
Written for a contest by myself and my daughter Chloe

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How adorable!! I love it :)
Give your daughter a big hug from me for participating!!
I love that children get involved with help of moms and dads.
Thank you for your entry into my Picture Poem This (24) contest.
Good luck to You & Chloe!!! Hope to see you both next round.
Peace n Light

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Your poem does well to describe the image and flows nicely and I love the rhyme and rhythm, making it fun to read.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

What an enchanting and enduring piece. I think this is a lagoon that I wouldn't mind visiting, but I get the feeling that it only exists in the minds of you and your daughter. Very well done!

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wonderful imagery combined with your excellent writing make this one great.
It leaves me wanting to go into that picture...:)

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Oh my Spence.
what a treasure for the time capsule. You and your daughter wrote a most beautiful poem..
Keep this someplace nice and safe.. Beautiful. And tell her the lady that lives near Disneyworld said god job!!!


Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Congrats on your big win!

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Visual and relaxing.
So much detail in so little space.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

How adorable!! I love it :)
Give your daughter a big hug from me for participating!!
I love that children get involved with help of moms and dads.
Thank you for your entry into my Picture Poem This (24) contest.
Good luck to You & Chloe!!! Hope to see you both next round.
Peace n Light

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on February 16, 2010
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spence
spence

Grimsby, United Kingdom



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