A poem about what happens when you finally violate people's trust in you one time too many. (Most unfortunately based off real life thing that happened to me)
Now your friends
don’t like you.
Oh, and mine don’t
either. Nor do I.
Poor you, feeling
lonely?
It’s too damn
f*****g bad.
That’s what you get
when
You consider people
playthings!
No means no. Stop
means stop. Get it straight.
Oh, you’re STILL
violating boundaries?
Sex toys your girl
friends are NOT!
You said you’d
never do it again.
Many a time you’ve
said this.
Pray tell us then, why?
After all this
forgiveness? Why do you
Throw a fast pitch
back into our faces?
How many times can
you prove false? CONGRATULATIONS!
I thought this was an amazing poem. I especially loved the ending, "Now enjoy the reaping!" You get what you give. I personally believe in karma. Very well written, and thank you again for taking a look at my autobiography. It meant a lot to me.
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Thank you so much, and exactly! Treating others badly accomplishes nothing but making those others .. read moreThank you so much, and exactly! Treating others badly accomplishes nothing but making those others hate you. Much appreciation for the review! [=
Many times we take people for granted and not even appreciate them all we do is at times use them but we never go to their aid in times of need, that is when little by little we start losing good friends and before we know it we are left all alone, you have written this well and passed the message right.
Impressive putting thoughts like these down, and quite relatable to a situation I've been thrust aboard recently. I like that I can sense the emotion you felt when you wrote this. Quite a way of captivating the reader.
Posted 10 Years Ago
10 Years Ago
Yikes, you can relate? If you had a similar situation then I VERY MUCH pity you
"Understand this, you reap what you sow. You’ve
Sown seeds of sorrow. Now enjoy the reaping!"
This is my kind of poetry. Honest an direct. I like the above lines. Karma is a fair judge. Sometime kind words are useless. Directness is needed to create separation. Thank you for the outstanding poetry.
Coyote
Posted 10 Years Ago
10 Years Ago
Thanks Coyote! I try to be direct in general, ESPECIALLY in confrontation- definitely not one to met.. read moreThanks Coyote! I try to be direct in general, ESPECIALLY in confrontation- definitely not one to metaphorically pull punches when angry, righteously or not.
So when they say 'Karma's a b***h', they totally mean it. ;)
Great write, Cher. I have been reading other of your poems and stories, and I didn't individually comment on them, but they were all amazing. You're a gifted writer, and as it seems from your 'About Me' section, a very compassionate and nice human being.
Nice meeting you. :D
I like this greatly, for like the blue lobster amongst a million red b******s, I am a good man... Not the raping sort. However, as I assume my place here is to do more than pat you on the back in agreement, why not take on a challenge: I dare you to write this same poem from HIS perspective. Believe me, you can be just as judgmental. He is an unredeemed and unsympathetic character, so make him a villain, but do it from within. Damn him more effectively by showing his rotten insides! Will you take on my challenge?
My, this is a fun challenge! Definitely going to have to think on it. I am practicing writing from t.. read moreMy, this is a fun challenge! Definitely going to have to think on it. I am practicing writing from the villain's perspective as is for my book Fallen Ones... the chapter is not up for another couple of chapters but I have muse to write the chapter from Jarmir's point of view now. After I finish that I may be able to do this one, especially knowing the rationale he used when I confronted him
10 Years Ago
I like it, and look forward to it!
10 Years Ago
Sweet! The chapter I mentioned is of course book format but answer to your challenge will be a poem .. read moreSweet! The chapter I mentioned is of course book format but answer to your challenge will be a poem or short story
My name is Cher Armstrong, also known as Speedy Hobbit. I'm a USATF athlete in racewalking for the Raleigh Walkers club team.
I just graduated from Queens College in Queens borough in New York Ci.. more..