I see

i see it in your face,
frustraition

fear

lies

hope

truth

possiblies.

i see it in your eyes,

buried deep within

an anger.

ready to burst to the surface,

finally taking a breath.

i slow rythem

but a fast pace

i try to keep pace,

only finding you further

ahead of me.

tapping my fingers,

i wait for your attention

to return to me.

to ask me how i feel.

you never look my way.

you look past,

far beyond.

what cant i see?

what can you?

i am just here,

because

you find amusement

in my pain?

i see it in your face,
lies.

 

Reviews

[Lanky]

This is so deeply tragic and conveys a sense of inner pain that all of us have felt before. I like the way it seems to flow but one part confused me a little. I believe it was "i slow rythem". This phrase doesn't seem to fit, i kept trying to figure out what it meant. Should it be "A slow rhythm"? that would fit much better. As it is now its good, but that line currently interferes with your flow and rhythm.