WENDIGO (ii)

the continuation

 Days passed by, I hid myself from the world

I was ashamed of who I have become or rather what

At a certain point I had to feed, after all I was turned

I had an option, to let the bite marks heal or feed & turn into a Wendigo too

 

Don’t blame me, I fed after all I had nothing left to live for

The first one asked why as I hungrily ripped off her heart & ate it raw

Someone turned me it wasn’t my fault I replayed

I watched her cry , I smiled & I never looked back

 

With time I couldn’t go back to my true form, I loved inflicting pain

I replaced smiles & blushes with tears & regret, I was becoming too good at this

I was loving being the Wendigo, I surrendered to the monstrosity haunting my thoughts

 I once crossed paths with my sire, I couldn’t feed on her, and lion don’t eat lion

 

The hatred of love took root in me, I vowed not to love

It was better I inflict pain than be at the receiving end

I secretly hated what I had become, heartbreaker

But it was too late, feeding on innocent hearts was now the daily meal

 

 

                            ***HEART BREAKS CAN EITHER TURN YOU INTO A MONSTER OR A GREAT

                                                  LOVER, AS FOR ME I CHOSE MONSTER 

Reviews

[Diamond Dunbar]

This deep. You acknowledged your darkness and you walked in it. You played in and you are you. As time changed so did you, and rather it’s for better or worse. In this moment it’s who you need to be.

[Aphy!]

Closing line was amazing and a really great ending to such a lovely poem. Great flow and easy to read (I read it twice and I loved it both times)
Aphy

[Zoë]

Honestly there's not much else I can say after so many other reviewers nailed it, but fantastically done. I loved the way you depicted the emotions of the narrator throughout both pieces. You're writing was quite beautiful and realistic, and your closing line was amazing.
Sorry that I can't really give you any critiques, but in terms of poetry I can't really pick things out and say "you should fix this". But if you have any questions feel free to ask me and I can look into specifics of what could be improved.

[Linda alexander]

Great footing on real world, a great poem, great flow of lines

[Dove]

This is a beautiful Poem. A bit relateable. It is an interesting analogy about the "transformation" that people may take when they get their heart broken. Very nice :)

[Mary Christabel George]

very wisely put.
It was needed that someone writes on this subject.
Heartbreak though but described in a different way.
Last & second last stanza supremely beautiful.
Completely agreed.

[Ruth]

When the seed of such grows it is hard to return to a former state, cool way to perceive a broken heart...it does change us...

[The Realist]

whoa, i felt everything.... very descriptive. love it Dash the Reaper! great job. :)

[Emily L]

your statement "heartbreaks can either turn you into a monster or a great lover" is so true, whether this heartbreak has taught you to love more and don't take the things that you love for granted or having the hatred after losing the person you loved almost as if it turned you into a "monster". Very nice poem, very descriptive, the words you wrote really make the reader see or even feel these feelings you have written. Never stop writing!