Destruction and Despair

Writing inspired by A monster calls, Patrick Ness.

Roaring in anger, a burst of adrenaline tore through Conors body, letting a surge of violent fury seep out of him. Like a lion ferociously ripping apart his prey, he mutilated the cream sofa , feathers straying out of there innocent home. All of a sudden, Conors fist plummeted through the mirror, whilst a cascade of glass was strewn over the floor. It felt good to destroy what he had been kept prisoner in for all these weeks. Pleadingly, the antique clock begged for mercy; but it was too late, Conor had already obliterated the clock... That nobody was allowed to touch.

Stepping backwards, Conor stared in disbelief at the utter destruction he had created. As soon as reality had awoken him, an aching numbness lay silent in the pit of his stomach. An aroma of panic and guilt lingered in the air like like smoke from an unseen fire. Full of  regret, his eyes were transfixed by the scene before him. "What have I done?" Conor repeated over and over in his mind, his eyes brimming with tears. Knock,knock,knock... Gran.

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[Prritiy]

Stepping backwards, Conor stared in disbelief at the utter destruction he had created. As soon as reality had awoken him, an aching numbness lay silent in the pit of his stomach. An aroma of panic and guilt lingered in the air like like smoke from an unseen fire. Full of regret, his eyes were transfixed by the scene before him. "What have I done?"

anger is the worst master and when it overpowers then it brings in destruction for which one has to repent later.

nice story in less words.

[Prritiy]

you are welcome.

[Relic]

I've been on here for a bunch of years and you definitely have talent as a writer. It's a pleasure to read someone new and not have to stumble over misspelled words or other bad grammar habits so common here. Welcome to Writers Cafe, I hope to see more from you again.

[Spagbella]

Thanks... Wow, Really? Don't worry you will be seeing a lot more writing from me, just leave comments and be totally truthful! :)

[Relic]

I certainly will.

[Ewerton_Cuco]

I loved this piece, while I think the scene itself was amazingly put together, in my opinion your writing was absolutely marvelous, it indeed just puts the reader on edge because it makes everything quite real. Good Job! Keep writing, okay? I wanna see more from you... Hey could you please read my short story, "Life Game", even though it's unfinished? Then, comment what you think about it!!! Thanks!!! Have a nice day!

[Spagbella]

Thanks very very much... this means alot! And dont worry I will! I have to keep writing... I am still at school! :)

[Jess]

The imagery is so strong it keeps the reader on the edge of their seat while reading this piece. I love the line "a cascade of glass was strewn over the floor" because I can truly imagine this all going down. Great Job!

[Spagbella]

Thanks, that is one of my favourite lines to! Im glad you enjoyed it!