Blurred lines & silent nights

Your voice is better than no voice.

His days are a haze
Blurred lines, uphill climbs
A fork in the road, which way to go?

Her voice.. "Come home"
The past; a passive flame
Keeps his heart warm
In the midst of a storm.

Questions... A flood of thoughts
"I'm here"
"She isn't"
"Is it meant to be this hard?"
"When does it start to make sense?"

Silence is his only companion
So he befriends the bottle of gold,
Urgently seeking answers at the bottom of his glass.

Author's Note

Poetic conversation, if you may.

Reviews

[Sourav]

Nice style of writing... and it ends with a impressive line. Well done.

[Spacecadet]

Thank you.

[Augustus]

You have managed to convey some subtle and complex notions in a remarkably simple way. The somewhat informal, conversational tone of the poem gives it a touch of familiarity that makes it easy for readers to relate to. I must laud your diction. For instance the word "passive" in "a passive flame" is remarkably revealing. Normally, one associates a lot of activity: heat and passion, with flames but here, since you're referring to the past, the person in question has to make do with the mere existence of the flame, rather than its action. The metaphor "bottle of gold" is also quite apt. All in all, a very effective package, this. A mature, skillful write. I searched for loopholes where I could put in some "constructive criticism" but I found none. I am very impressed.

[Spacecadet]

Wow Augustus, that means a lot. Thank you! It's very kind of you to take the time to write out such a detailed review. So glad you liked it :)

[Augustus]

You are most welcome, Spacecadet! I make an honest effort to give meaningful reviews and your poem was certainly worth my time. :)

[Vidya Bacchus]

A deep poem my friend.Too many search for answers at the bottom of a bottle and they never find them so they just keep on looking :)

[Spacecadet]

It's seemingly the easiest place to search. A resort for those that don't wish to dig deeper.
Thank you for your review, Vidya. Always nice to hear from you :)

[Frieda P]

That bottle of gold never holds the answers Spacecadet, a profound and intelligent poem my friend.

[Spacecadet]

It somehow manages to give us the illusion of having all the answers, even just momentarily.
Thank you for your kind words, Frieda. Always appreciated :)

[Frieda P]

Momentarily being the key word, sometimes we just want to linger in oblivion for a time. ;)

[Spacecadet]

I agree! Hence the "blurred lines" in the title.

[Frieda P]

I knew that, haven't had a drink yet lol ;)

[MAC]

This is a well written poem, poetically speaking :) Has a country music flavored theme to it. You have such a great style....easy to read and always something to enjoy.

[Spacecadet]

I can't deny that the image in my mind while writing it was quite country inspired! Thank you for the compliment, I am to write things that are easy and enjoyable :)

[Spacecadet]

*My aim is to.

[MAC]

were you singing it while you wrote it??? I do that, much to my dogs displeasure LOL. BTW, you have excellent aim :)

[Spacecadet]

Haha, oh no I couldn't dare to. Would displease a lot more people!
And thank you! :)

[Balkaran Sidhu]

A harsh road...silence..yearning..hard to bear

[Spacecadet]

Indeed. Thanks for the review!

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

Beautiful write, I love this poem. :-)

Kaze~

[Spacecadet]

Thank you, Kaze :)

[♔ CrownedDevil ☾]

Your very welcome. :-)

[MsJewel]

Creative and well written. I enjoyed this poetic conversation. Well done

:) Julie

[Spacecadet]

Thank you Julie, your review is much appreciated :)