Worlds Apart

Don't forget to breathe.

Worlds Apart

Stop for a second and look to the sky, my darling

The crystalline stars burn so bright for you

They speak the words I never could

They sing the song in your heart,

The one we wrote together

Stop for a second and take a breath, my darling

This life is not a fight

You chase the finish line of a race you run alone

Don't leave me behind in the dust

Stop for a second and close your eyes, my darling

Let the promises we whispered echo

In the depths of your soul

And we'll pretend our hearts didn't drown

Trying to swim the oceans that separate us.

Author's Note

This is for those of us that tend to forget the simplicity of the things that make us happy.

Reviews

[Nathan]

Yes, simplicity's the real mirror of our reflection. Simplicity's our both insider and outsider beauty. I love ..even I do adore this poem because the marvelous crimson red colors dispersing the aroma of love into the hearts via your pretty impressive poetic words. Sometimes, it's so better to look to the sky and pen down some words with the heart ..letting the pain go into the ashes and living the live with reality, singing to a song. Lovely poem. You give me new perceptive to look to the sky indeed.

[Raj]

Nice poem.theme won which it is written is really good. I like the lines
"Stop for a second and close your eyes, my darling
Let the promises we whispered echo
In the depths of your soul
And we'll pretend our hearts didn't drown
Trying to swim the oceans that separate us."

[Spacecadet]

Thanks Raj :)

[Shaquana Adams]

I really enjoyed this. Beauty in simplicity. Nicely penned!

-QuanaWana

[Madalyn Beck]

Wow. I really like this write, especially the last two lines.

"And we'll pretend our hearts didn't drown
Trying to swim the oceans that separate us."

Sometimes that happens, and it's so sad when it does. Truly fantastic piece here. :)

[Spacecadet]

I appreciate it, Madalyn :) Your kind words are humbling!

[zach h.]

I really liked this and the point you were trying to make in it. I especially enjoyed the second paragraph, but the whole thing had wonderful imagery to it. The title as well was interesting, it kind of caught me off-guard, but I liked it. Nicely done.

[Spacecadet]

I'm so happy you enjoyed it! The title is about slaying the demons of our day-to-day lives that hold us back from experiencing the true beauty of it all. I understand why it might have caught you off-guard though!

[Stefanie Holmes]

This is beautiful. We all need to just take a moment and stop, reflecting on the breathtaking moments of life.

~Stefanie

[Spacecadet]

Thanks so much Stefanie :) Yes, I think that's important too..

[Traci]

Life is about simplicity, living each and every moment as if it were our last. This poem is a reflection of such, so well written, from the depths of your heart and soul.

[Spacecadet]

Aw, thank you. This warms my heart :) I'm so happy that my passion is being noticed.

[Traci]

Your passion as a poet is noticed, but it is your beautiful heart that writes so soulful that evokes the emotion from a reader. You write about life, things we all experience, and when I can relate to that, it draws me in, leaving me wanting to read more. So keep writing, keep expressing....your wisdom is well beyond your years, so inspiring....

[Spacecadet]

So kind of you, my heart might burst! Haha, your words have made my day. Thank you ever so much :)read moreSo kind of you, my heart might burst! Haha, your words have made my day. Thank you ever so much :)
Your encouragement is exactly what I need to keep doing what I do.

[Coyote Poetry]

A very interesting poem.
"Let the promises we whispered echo
In the depths of your soul"
I like the want for love and want. The ending left me with question. I wanted to read more. No weakness in the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Spacecadet]

I'm glad you mentioned that! I was hoping for the ending to be a little bit of a cliff-hanger, I'm happy it came across that way :) Thank you so much for your lovely review!

[Frieda P]

Breathtaking and makes one stop and reflect on the sweet simplicity of it all. Nicely pen'd!

[Spacecadet]

Wow, thank you Frieda! Nice to hear from you :)

[Frieda P]

Was my pleasure, breathing now. ;-)

[Spacecadet]

You keep that going, most of my poems encourage it ;)

[Frieda P]

Ha good idea, otherwise I turn that putrid shade of green, never my favorite color. ;-)

[Spacecadet]

Now we wouldn't want that, would we? The shade you're wearing in your avatar does you good ^_^

[Frieda P]

Yep warpaint always helps ;-)

[ron]

This is so beautiful. Thank you for reminding us to remember the simple pleasures in life and with each other.

[Spacecadet]

It's really important for us to drop the pace and just look around from time to time, absorb what life has to offer and keep tabs on the things that mean most to us. We tend to forget, you know??

[ron]

Yes I agree.